Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The given graph demonstrate the harbour in 2000 and how it looks nowadays.
Overall, before there are no private beach and cafe's & shops are available in porth harbour however now-a-days they look so better and develop numerous things. Today, also develop more dock for boats.
In 2000, just enter first east side of main road they were look car parking place and lifeboat. Moreover, the castle discued and tiny small public beach also have in south sides. In upper east side was looked showers & toilet and one more car parking and also have marine private yards. There were also docks available in the ocean for passenger ferries in left east side
However, today has develop many things they look better for 2000. today also have develop the private beach for the people and build more docks for boat stay in there. In lower east side also have one hotel for staying night.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response attempts to summarise the maps of Porth Harbour in 2000 and today, but it suffers from severe limitations in task completion. While a few key changes are noted—such as the addition of a hotel replacing the disused castle, a private beach, and new docks—the information is presented in a very simplistic and fragmented manner. The overview is weak and ungrammatical, failing to effectively highlight the main overall trends, such as the general commercialisation and the swapping of locations between the marina and fishing boats. Furthermore, many parts of the visual data are misread or confused, and the lack of a clear, structured overview pulls the score down into the lower range. Overall, the task is addressed only partially, aligning with Band 4.0 descriptors.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The response is divided into paragraphs, but the logical flow and progression are heavily disrupted by poor referencing and inadequate cohesive devices. Sentences such as 'In 2000, just enter first east side of main road they were look car parking place' demonstrate a complete breakdown in sentence architecture and logical connection. Paragraphing is attempted, grouping the introduction, overview, and body details, but internal cohesion is faulty and mechanical throughout. Pronoun referencing and spatial connectors are either missing or misused, making it difficult for the reader to follow the spatial relationships on the maps. This corresponds to a Band 4.0 for Coherence and Cohesion.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, frequently relying on informal or inaccurate phrasing such as 'look so better', 'tiny small', and 'staying night'. There are noticeable word-choice and collocation errors throughout the text, such as 'demonstrate' used instead of 'illustrates' or 'compares', and 'castle discued' instead of 'disused castle'. Attempts to use less common vocabulary are either inaccurate or marred by spelling and morphological errors, such as 'develop' used in place of 'development' or the passive voice. The lexical range is minimally adequate for basic communication but contains errors that frequently strain the reader, placing it firmly at Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
Grammatical control is extremely weak throughout the response. The text is dominated by severe structural errors, incorrect verb tenses, missing auxiliary verbs, and faulty word order, as seen in 'before there are no private beach and cafe's & shops are available' and 'today has develop many things they look better for 2000'. Complex sentence forms are either absent or completely malformed, resulting in frequent errors that obscure meaning and impede communication. There is a complete lack of accurate punctuation and control over basic sentence boundaries. These pervasive grammatical inaccuracies align with a Band 4.0 score.
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