Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The graph illustre the harbour and its main feature,Make Comparisons where relevant in 2000 and how its looks today.

overall graph show the some enchance which is nessacery to do now a days in harbour such as cafe and shops included, showers and toilets also add, Dock place are spread,instead of castle now it is hotel which are significant.

so lets began from 2000, which are original porth harbour. There are not a various types of facility when compare to todays harbour such an example now there is only one dock which are not be satisfaction by a visitors they need to be wait for a next ride.

Now a days every things is perfect manner but there is a one disturbans there are every much crowded in the harbour due to increase a number of shopes and thare is car parking also change due to this so many people are suffering for car parking they need to be a satisfaction bye the visitors its a nessacery for the manager.

overall froom 2000, ti now the prth harbour are improve but little bit changes need just like a car parking much of the people are need a better car parking according to there needs.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response makes an attempt to summarise the maps, mentioning features such as the addition of cafés, shops, and a hotel replacing the castle. However, the task is addressed only minimally. The information is heavily generalised, and key spatial changes, such as the relocation of the marina and fishing boats, are misreported or confused. Furthermore, the inclusion of personal opinions and speculative commentary, such as 'visitors need to be wait' and manager recommendations, detracts from the objective reporting required in an academic task. To improve towards a higher band, the response must provide a clear, accurate overview of the visual data without introducing irrelevant outside commentary, and systematically compare the major physical developments between the two years.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is some organisation attempted through paragraph breaks, but the information is not arranged with clear overall progression. The links between ideas feel disjointed and mechanical, relying on conversational phrases like 'so lets began from 2000' and 'Now a days every things is perfect manner'. Paragraphing is haphazard, separating related thoughts arbitrarily. Referencing is also unclear, making it difficult to follow which time period or feature is being discussed. To achieve a higher score, the response needs a logical structure that begins with an introductory overview, moves into well-sequenced body paragraphs comparing specific map features, and uses appropriate cohesive devices smoothly without conversational intrusions.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with frequent lexical errors that strain the reader. Words are often used with incorrect forms or collocations, such as 'enchance' instead of enhancements, 'nessacery', 'disturbans', and 'shopes'. Phrases like 'spread' for docks and 'every much crowded' demonstrate a very limited control of language suitable for academic writing. Communication is impeded by these persistent lexical inaccuracies and spelling mistakes. To move up to a higher band, the student needs to build a wider range of vocabulary specific to describing maps and changes over time, and ensure correct word forms and spellings are used consistently.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple and heavily flawed sentence structures. There are frequent errors in tense usage, article selection, subject-verb agreement, and pluralisation, such as 'The graph illustre', 'how its looks today', 'there is a one disturbans', and 'increase a number of shopes'. These frequent grammatical errors cause significant difficulty for the reader and distort meaning in places. To reach a higher level, the writer must demonstrate control over basic grammatical patterns, improve sentence construction, and reduce errors in punctuation and verb forms so that complex ideas can be expressed clearly and accurately.

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