Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The diagram displays the development of porth Harbour from 2000 till present.

Overall there is a significant changes for the easy accessable for the public, in details, expanded the dock permises for pessenger boats also constructed the cafes and shops,moreover straight acess to car park from main road is implemented.

In 2000 parth Habour had a limited facilities for tourist , talking about public beach is located at the far east side nearest to dock. although

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the maps as showing harbour development and attempt an overview, mentioning changes to the dock and the addition of cafés and shops. However, the response addresses the task only partially: it stops before describing most of the changes, and the overview claim about “straight access to car park from main road” is not supported by the plans. The beach description is also inaccurate: the public beach is at the north-east in both maps, while the southern beach becomes private for the hotel. The response is 74 words below the required minimum, which leaves too little space to select and compare the main features. To improve, complete the summary and report the key relocations, the hotel replacing the castle, and the changes to the dock.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response, beginning with an introduction, followed by an overview and then a detail paragraph. This gives the reader some indication of the intended structure. However, the final paragraph breaks off after “although,” so there is no completed progression through the map features or a concluding comparison. Connections between ideas are also unclear: “in details” and “moreover” do not create a clear relationship between the points, and the overview combines several changes without explaining how they relate. Use complete paragraphs with one clear purpose each, and sequence the changes by location or by what was replaced, added, or relocated. Avoid leaving a sentence unfinished.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “development,” “dock,” “passenger boats,” “car park,” and “cafes and shops,” so the topic is generally recognisable. There is also an attempt to use more formal wording such as “significant changes.” However, the range is limited, and several spelling and word-choice errors make parts difficult to understand, including “easy accessable,” “permises,” “pessenger,” and “parth Habour.” Some phrases are not natural for describing maps, such as “straight acess to car park.” Practise accurate map vocabulary and collocations, for example “the dock was extended,” “the marina was relocated,” and “facilities were added.” Check spelling carefully, especially for words copied from the map labels.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts more than simple statements, using an overview sentence and a subordinate clause beginning “although.” However, the range of sentence structures is narrow, and errors in sentence formation and grammar frequently make the meaning unclear. For example, “there is a significant changes” has a subject–verb and number mismatch, while “expanded the dock permises” lacks a clear subject and complete verb structure. “In 2000 parth Habour had a limited facilities” also has an article and plural error. The final “although” clause is unfinished, and punctuation around sentence boundaries is inconsistent. Build complete sentences with an explicit subject and verb, and check agreement, articles, and whether each clause can stand as written.

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