Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The maps illutraste the comparison of a harbour between 2000 and today.

Overall, as compared to the map in 2000, some places have been redesigned while few has been renamed in todays map of a porth harbour. Furthermore, one single place has been newly constructed in a new map.

To begin with, in 2000, there were ''showers and tolets'' and car parks along with the main road. Between those two car parks, another 'showers and toilet' has been built in todays map. And the path connected to the below car park from the road has been cut and join to the main road. As compared to the previous map, the dock has been divided into two, so that two boats can be parked there for the passenger ferries. The Marine(private yachts) and fishing boats has been exchanges in between

Moreover, The castle(disused) has been replaced with hotel, as well as the public beach below the castle has been renamed with the private beach for the hotel residents. Additionally, the 'cafe nd shops' has been constructed on the west side of the lifeboat.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify several important changes, including the relocation of the marina and fishing boats, the replacement of the disused castle by a hotel, and the change from a public to a hotel beach. Your opening overview also recognises that the harbour has been redesigned. This gives the response a relevant overall focus. However, some key details are inaccurate or unclear: the dock was not divided into two; it gained an additional jetty, with two boats berthed on opposite sides. The new showers and toilets are not simply between the two car parks, and the road connection is not described clearly enough to verify the claimed change. The overview also says only one place was newly constructed, although cafés and shops were added. More precise coverage of the main changes would strengthen the summary.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs describing changes. Sequencing phrases such as “To begin with” and “Moreover” help signal movement between points, and the main comparisons are generally grouped by location or feature. However, progression within the body is sometimes difficult to follow. For example, the sentence about the car parks, showers, and road connection combines several changes without making their locations clear, while “The Marine… and fishing boats has been exchanges in between” is incomplete and interrupts the flow. The overview also repeats the general idea of redesign without clearly previewing the major changes. Use clearer topic grouping and explicit location references to make the comparisons easier to track.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant map vocabulary, including “replaced,” “constructed,” “main road,” and “private beach,” and you attempt to describe changes rather than merely list labels. However, spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable and sometimes make the meaning less clear: “illutraste,” “tolets,” “Marine,” and “exchanges” are examples. Some expressions are also imprecise or unnatural, such as “parked there for the passenger ferries” and “renamed with the private beach.” Use the exact map labels where possible and choose collocations suited to maps—for example, boats are “berthed,” and a beach “became” or “was converted into” a private beach. More accurate spelling and precise location vocabulary would improve clarity.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mixture of simple and more complex sentences, including comparisons with “as compared to” and clauses introduced by “so that.” The overall meaning is usually recoverable, but some grammatical errors affect clarity. Subject–verb agreement is inconsistent in “some places have been redesigned while few has been renamed” and “the Marine… and fishing boats has been exchanges.” The sentence beginning “Between those two car parks” also has an unclear structure, and the final sentence needs a clearer grammatical link between the cafés and the lifeboat station. There are some issues with articles, plurals, and punctuation as well. Aim for accurate subject–verb agreement and build each sentence around one clearly stated change before adding comparisons.

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