Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The digrame illustrate the porth harbour in year 200 as well as todays image of harbour Overall it is clearly seen that there are lots of major chages as well as development of new things which depicts in new image of harbour as comapair to year 2000 To initate with there is introduction of two new developments cafe and shops as well as hotel in year 2000 there is castle near public beach however hotel is built at the place of castle although the cafe and shops built near the life boat more over the new dock is introduce as well as more boats where introduce Further more shiffting of places done in new day harbourfishing boats shiffted at the place of maina although the marina yachts shifts at the place of fishing boats moving further new shower and toilets develop over the second car parking which is in south side of harbour

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify several important changes, including the replacement of the castle by a hotel, the addition of cafés and shops, and the exchange of locations between the marina and fishing boats. Your opening overview also recognises that the harbour has undergone substantial development. However, the overview is broad rather than selective: it would be clearer to summarise the main pattern, such as the harbour’s commercial and tourist development and the changes to its facilities. Some details are unclear or inaccurate; for example, the new showers and toilets are not simply “over the second car parking,” and the southern beach changes from public to private for hotel guests. The dock’s extra jetty and the public beach that remains unchanged are also useful comparisons to report.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic overall sequence: an introduction and overview are followed by details about new facilities and changes to the harbour. This gives the reader some sense of organisation. However, the information is crowded into long, loosely connected sentences, and the progression between features is not always clear. Connectors such as “To initiate with,” “more over,” and “Further more” are used mechanically, while the final sentence combines several changes without clearly separating them. Paragraphing is also not used to distinguish the overview from the detailed comparisons. Organise the body into clearer groups—for example, new land facilities and beach changes, then changes to the harbour basin and dock—and use linking words only where they show a precise relationship.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt relevant map vocabulary, including “developments,” “shifting,” “marina,” “dock,” and “car parking,” and the reader can identify many of the changes you mean. However, the range is limited and several word choices or spellings make the description difficult to follow, such as “new day harbour,” “maina,” and “shiffted.” Some phrases are also unnatural for describing plans: “new things” is vague, and “more boats where introduce” does not clearly describe the additional boats shown at the dock. Use precise labels from the map and standard collocations, such as “the marina was relocated” or “an additional jetty was added.” Careful proofreading of spelling and word forms would make your meaning more reliable.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You make some attempts to combine ideas using clauses and sequencing phrases, but sentence control is weak. Several sentences lack clear grammatical boundaries, particularly the long sentence beginning “To initiate with,” which joins multiple changes without reliable punctuation. Verb forms and tense are often inaccurate: “there is introduction” and “the marina yachts shifts” should use appropriate past or present passive forms to describe the plans. Articles and agreement also need attention, as in “the place of castle” and “the cafe and shops built.” These errors sometimes make relationships between features unclear. Practise writing shorter, complete comparison sentences, then add controlled complex structures—for example, “The castle was replaced by a hotel, while the beach became private.”

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