Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given diagrams illustrate the maps of the porth Harbour in 2000 and showing advancements today.

Overall, the 7 sites of the map demostrated in 2000 and upgarded with 13 sites today. The of north public beach, car parking area, and lifeboat are remain at the same place. While Marina (private yachts) and fishing boats have been shuffled today.

In 2000, the two entrences from the east-side main road were firstly linked with car parkings and one of the east side road jointed with lifeboat area, public beach and castle (disues) loacted at the south-east bank of the sea. The north area of the map associated with showers and toilets behined of car parkand Marina quit near to car park. Moreover, one dock, and public beach with two passengers farries were located at north-east side.

Today, the place of castle (disues), and public beach are converts into hotel and private beach, respectively. Futhermore, three entrences are associated with two cark parks with shower & toilets, and other one directelty linked with lifeboat. The two docks with three passenger farries loacte at north today

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main transformation from a castle to a hotel and from a public to a private beach, and you note that the marina and fishing-boat areas have exchanged positions. These are relevant features, and the overview attempts to compare the two plans. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear: the main road is on the west, not the east, and the northern dock is not described as two docks. The claim of “three passenger ferries” is also unsupported; the plans show passenger ferries nearby but do not establish that number. Several important changes, including the new cafés and shops and the additional dock jetty, are omitted. More precise coverage of the key changes would make the summary more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for the earlier and current layouts. This gives the reader a basic route through the comparison. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “Moreover,” and “Furthermore” help signal additions, although some connections are mechanical or do not clarify the relationship between features. For example, “three entrences are associated with two cark parks” is difficult to follow, and the final sentence introduces several details without explaining how they relate to the earlier arrangement. Organise each body paragraph around a clear area or type of change, and use explicit comparisons such as “whereas” and “in contrast” to make the progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “Marina (private yachts),” “lifeboat,” “public beach,” and “private beach,” and you attempt to describe change with “shuffled” and “converts into.” However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unclear, such as “maps of the porth Harbour,” “entrences,” “east-side main road,” and “jointed with lifeboat area.” Spelling errors, including “demostrated,” “upgarded,” and “farries,” are noticeable and sometimes make details harder to interpret. Aim for precise map language: describe places as being “located,” “replaced,” or “relocated,” and use “road” or “access road” consistently. Proofreading spelling and choosing natural collocations would improve clarity.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast with “While Marina … and fishing boats have been shuffled today.” However, some sentence structures are incomplete or faulty, and errors in tense, agreement, articles, and word order recur. For example, “The given diagrams illustrate the maps … and showing advancements today” combines incompatible verb forms, while “The … public beach, car parking area, and lifeboat are remain” has an incorrect verb construction. “The place of castle … and public beach are converts” also shows problems with articles and passive form. These errors sometimes make relationships between locations difficult to understand. Practise accurate past-versus-present descriptions and build longer sentences from a clear subject and verb before adding comparisons.

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