Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In this picture , they illustrate the quality of Porth Harbour in 2000 and today's day.

First of all, noticeable detail in first 2000 Porth Harbour show a small territory. There are two car park ,only one private yachts and hardly to figure out with eyes. The main road has only two exit to beach and absent of caffee and shops mall.To make improvment of this place we should move forward.

Secondly, porth harbout for today has really great glow up.if we give attention we able to find most thigs that was described in our last paragraph. There are special place for fisher and a new esit to beach . Additinaly, cafes and shops, new modern hotel to visiters of this place. if owner of place will keep this pace it will get best version of yourself ever.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response identifies the two time periods and mentions several relevant changes, including the addition of cafés and shops and a hotel. However, it does not provide a clear, factual overview of the harbour’s main transformations. Some details are inaccurate or unclear: the “new exit to beach” is not a change shown, and the fishing boats and marina are not described as having exchanged locations. Much of the response gives opinions or recommendations—“we should move forward” and “it will get best version”—rather than summarising the plans. The response is also 12 words below the required minimum. To improve, describe the key changes accurately and neutrally, including the relocated marina and fishing area, and the hotel replacing the castle.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is a basic two-part structure, with “First of all” introducing the 2000 plan and “Secondly” introducing the present-day plan. This gives the reader some sense of sequence, and the response refers back to the earlier paragraph. However, the progression is not consistently clear: the first paragraph mixes map description with a recommendation, while the second shifts into praise and speculation. Phrases such as “most things that was described in our last paragraph” are vague and do not clearly connect specific changes. Organise the response around an overview followed by grouped comparisons, and use linking expressions to show actual changes rather than relying mainly on “firstly” and “secondly”.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response attempts some topic-related vocabulary, including “harbour,” “private yachts,” “car park,” “fisher,” and “hotel,” so the subject is recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or spellings make the description unclear or informal. “Great glow up” and “best version of yourself ever” are conversational and unsuitable for an academic map summary; “small territory” and “special place for fisher” are also imprecise. There are noticeable spelling errors, such as “improvment,” “caffee,” “harbout,” and “Additinaly.” Use precise map vocabulary and neutral terms, for example “facilities,” “relocated,” “replaced,” and “expanded,” and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response uses some simple sentence forms and attempts longer constructions, but grammatical control is inconsistent. Errors include “they illustrate” (the subject is singular), “There are two car park,” and “the main road has only two exit,” where plural forms are needed. The sentence “if owner of place will keep this pace it will get best version of yourself ever” has problems with articles, clause structure, and pronoun reference. Punctuation and capitalisation are also inconsistent, as in “today's day” and the lower-case “if” after a full stop. These errors sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add controlled comparisons using forms such as “whereas” and “has been replaced by.”

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