Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In this plan harbour show in 2000 and today present.

In this map main features and shows comparison .

Harbour is a public beach in 2000 beach has four directions north,west,south,east. Through the main road there is an entrance of beach it shows public washrooms,ferries,lifeboat,fishing boats yachts.It was an ancient time in this time no more peaples visit beaches due to the lack of facilities.Tn this time, people were simple they were not interested activities like jet ski ,parasailing even they don't know about these activites and hotels on beach.

But today Porth harbour shows clearly expanded things activities in present.

Harbour shows hotels facilities for peaples on beach .The main features of harbour is increasing day by day due to the social experiments and information. In today harbour is also a private beach but in past its just a public beach

Private beach play very important role and its also good for privacy.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response recognises that the maps compare the harbour in 2000 with its present-day form, and it notes one genuine change: the beach that was public is now private. However, it does not provide a clear overview of the main developments or accurately describe the harbour’s layout. Claims about “four directions” and an “entrance of beach” do not explain the map, while the comments about jet skiing, parasailing, visitors’ interests and social change are not shown in the visual. Important changes are omitted, including the relocation of the fishing boats and marina, the addition of cafés and shops, and the replacement of the disused castle by a hotel. Focus on observable features and compare their locations and uses.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to separate the description of the earlier harbour from the present with “But today,” and the final point returns to the public-to-private beach change. However, the ideas are not arranged as a clear map summary: the opening repeats the task, and the middle shifts into speculation about people’s lifestyles and activities rather than progressing through the locations or changes. Connections between details are often unclear, as in “Through the main road there is an entrance of beach.” Organise the response into an introduction, an overview of the main changes, and paragraphs comparing specific areas. Use simple linking phrases such as “In the north” and “By contrast” to make the sequence easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some relevant topic vocabulary, including “main road,” “ferries,” “lifeboat,” “fishing boats,” “yachts,” and “private beach.” This shows a basic attempt to describe harbour features, but the range is repetitive and several choices are inaccurate or unclear. For example, “public washrooms” is not the map’s label, “expanded things activities” does not convey a specific change, and “social experiments” appears to be an unsuitable phrase in this context. Spelling errors such as “peaples” and “activites” also reduce clarity. Build a more precise map vocabulary, using terms such as “facilities,” “relocated,” “replaced,” and “adjacent to,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both short statements and longer sentences, including “In today harbour is also a private beach but in past its just a public beach.” However, grammatical errors are frequent and sometimes make relationships between features difficult to understand. Examples include “In this plan harbour show,” “Harbour is a public beach,” and “The main features of harbour is increasing,” where verb forms, articles and sentence structure are not controlled. Tense and agreement also need attention when comparing past and present. Practise clear patterns such as “In 2000, the beach was public, whereas today it is private” and “The marina was moved to the southern basin.” Use full stops to separate complete ideas.

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