Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The plane illustrate a harbour in 2000 in comparison how many changers are happend today

Overall, It can clearly be seen that there were major development will occur porth harbour facilities past and present

In 2000 they had public beach the both car parks ate directly conected the main road to life boat.Whereas the shower and toilets are situated in the west of the side bessid the marina private yatch whether,fishing boad was located in south side.The castle disused situated in southeast side

display the porth harbour today there were many cnanges on facilities they build two showers and toilets in the west side with two car park while the marina private yatch is change as a fishing boats it is located down to that.A new cafes and shops are open south side beside to the life boat.However the life boat in unchanges it is in same place.Moreover, castle disused became as a hotel and they add one more dock

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the harbour’s overall development and report several relevant changes, including the hotel replacing the disused castle, the addition of cafés and shops, and the lifeboat remaining in place. However, the overview is vague (“major development”) and does not clearly summarise the main pattern of change. Some details are inaccurate or unclear: the marina did not become fishing-boat facilities; the two uses exchanged locations, with fishing boats moving to the northern basin and the marina to the southern one. The dock gained an additional jetty and a second berthed boat, rather than simply “one more dock.” The beaches and the passenger-ferry area are also omitted. A more precise overview and accurate comparisons of the key relocations would make the report more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable sequence: an introduction, an overall statement, a description of the earlier harbour, and a paragraph about today. This gives the reader a basic framework, and linking expressions such as “Whereas,” “However,” and “Moreover” show an attempt to connect ideas. However, progression within the paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow because several locations and changes are compressed into long, loosely connected sentences. For example, the sentence beginning “In 2000 they had public beach” moves between beaches, car parks, the road, and the lifeboat without clearly separating these features. Some links also imply relationships that are unclear. Group changes by area or type, and use clearer references such as “in the northern basin” and “in the south” to improve cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “harbour,” “car parks,” “marina,” “fishing boats,” “lifeboat,” and “hotel,” so the reader can identify many of the features being described. There is also an attempt to use language for comparison and change, such as “Whereas” and “became.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or forms make meaning unclear, including “plane” for “plan,” “changers,” “ate directly conected,” and “the marina … is change as a fishing boats.” Spelling errors such as “happend,” “yatch,” and “boad” are noticeable. Build a more accurate set of map-description verbs and phrases, for example “was relocated,” “was replaced by,” and “remained unchanged,” and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to form both simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast with “Whereas” and a sentence beginning “Moreover.” However, control of sentence structure and verb forms is inconsistent, and errors often make relationships between features hard to understand. For example, “there were major development will occur” combines incompatible past and future forms, while “the marina … is change as a fishing boats” has problems with tense, passive construction, and number. Articles and agreement are also unreliable, as in “a new cafes and shops are open.” Several sentences lack clear boundaries or punctuation, particularly the long description beginning “In 2000 they had public beach.” Practise accurate past-tense descriptions and passive forms such as “was replaced by,” and separate each main comparison into a complete sentence.

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