Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

the map shows the changing in Harbour map from 2000 how the current maps looks a like .

there are some changing in Porth Harbour in todays date and organization make some improvements and looks more beautiful then in 2000.

Porth Harbour in 2000 have many facilities like two public beach ,passenger ferries ,two car parking .In 2000there is no private beach for special persons and no private facilities and Porth Harbour in todays world have lot more facilities than before specially for private persons.

Porth Harbour provide private beach for special customers while if its compares to the 2000 Porth Harbour the organization increase too much facilities like cafes and shops, and they also switch the location marina with fishing boats area and todays Harbour also provide 2 showers and toilets places and they also build a hotel so anyone who wants to stay here can easily get the hotel room. today Harbour providing more features and facilities than 2000

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the broad change that the harbour has gained more facilities, and you mention several relevant developments, including the hotel, cafés and shops, the private beach, and the exchange of the marina and fishing-boat areas. However, the response does not clearly summarise the main spatial changes or compare the two plans in a systematic way. The claim that there were “two public beach” in 2000 is inaccurate: the southern beach becomes private, while the north-eastern public beach remains. The statement about “no private facilities” is also too broad. To strengthen the overview, state the key changes accurately, then describe the main relocations and additions with their positions.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic progression from a general introduction to details about the harbour in 2000 and today, so the reader can follow its overall topic. However, the ideas are grouped into long, crowded sentences rather than clearly organised paragraphs, and the comparison is often repetitive: “more facilities” and “more features and facilities” recur without adding distinct information. Linking phrases such as “while if its compares” do not clearly show the relationship between the two plans. Organise the response into an introduction, a concise overview, and one or two paragraphs comparing specific areas. Use clear links such as “In contrast” or “Meanwhile” to guide the reader through the changes.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “marina,” “fishing boats,” “cafes and shops,” and “private beach,” which helps communicate the general subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unclear, such as “changing in Harbour map,” “organization increase too much facilities,” and “special customers.” Repeated use of “facilities” and “more” also makes the description imprecise. Choose vocabulary that describes map changes directly, such as “was relocated,” “was replaced by,” and “was added,” and use “visitors” rather than “special customers.” More precise wording will make the comparisons easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts to connect ideas in longer sentences, for example with “while,” “and,” and “so,” but these structures are often faulty and make some relationships difficult to follow. There are frequent problems with verb forms and agreement: “the map shows the changing” and “Porth Harbour … have” should use more accurate forms. Articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries also need attention, as in “two public beach” and the run-on final sentence. Most sentences rely on basic patterns, with limited accurate control of more complex structures. Practise writing shorter, complete sentences first, then combine related comparisons using correctly formed clauses and consistent present or past tenses.

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