Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In recent years many people believe that working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend. I partially agree with this view because it may balance their life and improve work life balance, although it may have disadvantages to company bussiness.

In one hand, labour should have less working hours, so they can spend more time with their family, and it makes a productive day when they return to work. They also balance their personal and work life together, However empolyes can have sufficient time and have less stress work. In addition it improve health condition. If empolyes work for shorter period they can manage their time and they can relax and doesn't gets tired. As result this change can help empolyes to work stress free.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You state a position—“I partially agree”—and give relevant reasons, including more family time, reduced stress, improved health, and possible effects on businesses. However, the response addresses the task only partially: the disadvantage to companies is mentioned in the introduction but never explained, and the benefits are asserted rather than supported with examples or detailed reasoning. The response is also 133 words below the required minimum, which leaves too little space to develop your position and address both sides of your partial agreement. To strengthen the response, explain the business concern, develop each main reason with a specific example, and make your conclusion clear.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening paragraph gives your position, followed by a paragraph about workers’ benefits. Some linking expressions, such as “In addition” and “As result,” show an effort to connect ideas. However, the paragraph does not progress clearly from one point to the next: family time, productivity, work-life balance, stress, and health are listed without distinct development. “In one hand” also does not correctly signal a contrast, and “However” is placed within a sentence in a way that disrupts the connection. Use separate paragraphs for the benefits and drawbacks, and make each paragraph develop one central idea in a logical sequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the general topic, with relevant terms such as “working hours,” “productive,” “stress,” and “health condition.” However, the range is limited and several noticeable spelling, word-form, and collocation errors make the writing less natural. Examples include “bussiness,” “empolyes,” “stress work,” and “work stress free.” Some phrases are also imprecise, such as “balance their personal and work life together.” Aim to use accurate workplace vocabulary and check spelling carefully. More natural expressions such as “business operations,” “employees,” “work-related stress,” and “maintain a healthy work-life balance” would make your ideas clearer and more appropriate for this topic.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple sentences and longer structures, including a reason clause beginning “because” and a conditional sentence beginning “If employees work for shorter period.” However, the range remains limited, and errors occur frequently enough to affect clarity. For example, “working week” needs an article, “it improve” has incorrect subject–verb agreement, and “doesn't gets tired” combines the auxiliary and verb forms incorrectly. The sentence beginning “They also balance…” is followed by “However” without a clear sentence boundary, and “As result” is missing an article. Practise accurate articles, agreement, verb forms, and sentence boundaries, then use a wider range of structures with careful proofreading.

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