Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The working week should be shorter and worker should have a longer weekend. This essay will explain both perspective statements before my opinion. I strongly disagree this statement.

On the one hand, majority industrial daily working based with workers and only take off one rest in employees. The most working for 10 to 12 hours also running,some time night duty to works in workers. For example, hotel,call center,police and docters,nurs duty 24 hours working in the all the days. While,chef one day non stop working and only one day off they workers and hospital is most important all the peoples ao 24 hours doctor&nurse available that a place. As a result, they are the worker working week should be shorter ,affected of people o

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

Your position is clear in the opening: “I strongly disagree,” and you attempt to support it with examples of workers in hotels, call centres, policing and healthcare. However, the response addresses the question only minimally. The examples mainly describe demanding jobs and round-the-clock services; they do not explain why a shorter working week or longer weekend would be harmful, nor do they clearly establish why you disagree with the proposal. The phrase “This essay will explain both perspective statements” also promises a balanced discussion that the response does not provide. The response is 124 words, below the required 250, so the argument remains substantially incomplete. Develop a direct reason for your position and explain how each example supports it.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening states your opinion, followed by a paragraph beginning “On the one hand” and examples. This gives the reader some sense of direction. However, the ideas do not progress clearly from the claim to its explanation, and the paragraph ends with an incomplete thought: “affected of people o”. The linking phrase “As a result” does not introduce a clear conclusion, while “On the one hand” suggests a contrasting point that is not developed. Several examples are placed together without explaining their relationship. Use separate paragraphs for your position, reasons and conclusion, and connect each example explicitly to the argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “working week,” “weekend,” “night duty,” “hotel,” and “hospital,” so the general subject is recognisable. However, the range is basic and several word choices or collocations make the meaning difficult to follow, such as “majority industrial daily working based with workers” and “only take off one rest in employees.” There are also spelling and form errors, including “docters” and “nurs.” These issues fit a response where vocabulary is limited and errors can strain the reader’s understanding. Build a bank of accurate phrases for working conditions and schedules, such as “shift work,” “staffing levels,” and “essential services,” and check spelling and word forms before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts a few different sentence forms, including the opening statement, “I strongly disagree,” and a sentence introduced by “For example.” However, grammatical control is inconsistent, and errors frequently make relationships between ideas unclear. For instance, “The most working for 10 to 12 hours also running” lacks a clear subject and correctly formed verb, while “only one day off they workers” has an unclear sentence structure. Agreement and articles are also problematic in “worker should have” and “majority industrial daily working.” The final sentence is incomplete, which further obscures meaning. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with clauses using “because,” “although” and “for example.”

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