Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
some peoples say that the working week should be longer and some say that it should be short. but my opinion is that the weekend will be short some peoples can not gave his time to his family .so if he will be short they will be relaxes and gave her time to there family and they enjoy the moment with them its my opinion that the weekend will be short so that peoples cam spend your time with her family . for example ; a one family person worked in whole days and weekend he could be depressed from his family and everything he cannot constreat his family and he would be upset and sad . is that is one. for example a person worked the whole day he thought that he is not important for his family and his friends so felt bad and do not will be happy in his life . he thought that he is not important for his family and any other .he could be heartless for everything so his life will be boring and bad for his life.
so i want to say that peopled should be in a whole day and the week they shouid be get a holiday from his work and spend the tim with his family and friends i think he feel very good i thought that holiday is very impotant for every person in his life .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you attempt to address the prompt, the position is unclear due to confusing phrasing, such as stating 'the weekend will be short' when you likely mean the working week. The arguments are repetitive and lack depth, relying on vague descriptions of stress rather than exploring the broader societal or economic implications of a shorter working week. To improve, you must ensure your position is clearly stated in the introduction and that each paragraph provides a distinct, well-supported argument that directly addresses the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks a clear logical structure. Paragraphing is used, but the ideas within the paragraphs do not flow logically. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences and ideas, making the text feel disjointed. For example, the transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs is abrupt, and the repetition of phrases like 'he thought that he is not important' creates a circular argument rather than a progressive one. To improve, use linking words such as 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'in addition' to connect your thoughts and ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic words like 'bad', 'good', and 'important', which do not demonstrate the range required for higher bands. There are also significant issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'a one family person' and 'constreat' (likely meant 'concentrate'). Many sentences are difficult to understand due to these lexical inaccuracies. To improve, focus on learning synonyms for common adjectives and practice using collocations in context, such as 'work-life balance' or 'professional burnout', rather than relying on simple, repetitive phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'some peoples can not gave'), pronoun usage (e.g., 'gave her time to there family'), and tense consistency. Sentence structures are mostly simple and often fragmented or run-on. Punctuation is also problematic, with inconsistent spacing and misuse of semicolons. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring that subjects and verbs agree and that pronouns correctly refer to their antecedents. Practicing the difference between simple, compound, and complex sentences will also help improve your range.
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