Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-30
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
In this time people think that the employs have a more weekend compare to the working days.
On this time, I am agree with that the workers have a big weekend it mane risen is that they need to take care of there mint and there body there fore they work best and do best for there company. Today people work on the other city for bater salary that why they want big weekend, to meet with there family on the last days of work. The weekend is a best time for a person who work in the company if he not goat the rest he feel so bad for his life. The worker want a weekend for take a large nap of sleep. He work to make a money and want to go on a party. They want a big weekend for shoping and use it for therapy.
A worker is able for have a weekend, but he when he work in the week. When the worker not work in the all week he need to fulfill his work in the weekend.
In my experience the worker work hard in the all week the are need for weekend to make fresh them self. In my experience when I was a worker in a pizza shop I see the weekend as sleeping day and make my self feel bater for next week.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you state your position clearly, the arguments are repetitive and lack depth. For instance, you mention the need for rest for the 'mind and body' and family time, but these points are not expanded upon with specific examples or logical consequences. The essay is underdeveloped, and the failure to reach the word count means the task is only partially addressed. To improve, you should aim to elaborate on your points with more detailed explanations and examples to reach the required length.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks a clear structure. While there are paragraph breaks, the progression of ideas is disjointed. You use some basic cohesive devices like 'therefore' and 'in my experience', but they are often used incorrectly or in a way that does not improve the flow of the argument. The transition between sentences is frequently abrupt, making it difficult for the reader to follow your logic. To improve, focus on using transition words more effectively and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that supports your main argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive, with frequent errors in word choice and spelling that occasionally impede communication. For example, 'mane risen' (main reason), 'bater' (better), and 'goat' (got) demonstrate a lack of control over basic vocabulary. You rely on simple, informal language throughout the text. To reach a higher band, you need to expand your range of vocabulary to include more academic and precise terms, and pay closer attention to spelling and word forms to ensure your meaning is clear.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that make the text difficult to read. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the employs have'), incorrect preposition usage, and sentence structure (e.g., 'he when he work in the week'). You rely almost exclusively on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences are often grammatically incorrect. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles and prepositions. Proofreading for common errors will also help improve the accuracy of your writing.
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