Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Employeement week days shoud be reduced and holidays should be expanded for the staff.my my perspective I Partially agree with this statement moreover i will this in given below paragragraph.

Having aducate weekends assist the employee for dealing with their mental as well as physical problem .If there wll be more holidays the staff will spend their quality times with their family and also begin to work more for the company. for instance if the staff are given required number of off days they can also handle their persinal works and on duty they will

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You identify a position—“I Partially agree”—and give a relevant reason: longer weekends could help workers manage mental and physical problems and spend time with family. However, the response develops only this one point, and the example about staff handling personal work is unfinished (“they will…”). The discussion does not explain what limits your agreement or address the issue in enough depth to fully answer the question. The response is also substantially below the required 250 words, leaving the argument incomplete. To improve, state clearly which changes you support, explain both the benefits and any reservations, and develop each reason with a complete, specific example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening states your view, followed by a paragraph giving a reason and an example. This gives the reader a general sense of the intended progression. However, the response ends abruptly, and the example is not completed, so the ideas do not form a finished argument. The opening phrase “moreover i will this in given below paragragraph” does not clearly signal how the essay will proceed, while “for instance” introduces an example that is not fully explained. Use separate paragraphs for your position, supporting reasons, and conclusion, and connect each point with clear, accurate transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “mental as well as physical problem,” “quality times,” “family,” and “personal works.” These choices show an attempt to discuss employee wellbeing and work-life balance. However, spelling errors and inaccurate or unnatural word combinations often make the meaning difficult to follow: “Employeement,” “aducate weekends,” and “holidays should be expanded” do not express the ideas clearly. “Quality times” and “personal works” are also not natural in this context. Build accuracy with common topic collocations such as “longer weekends,” “spend quality time,” and “personal responsibilities,” then check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both a position statement and a longer conditional sentence, as in “If there wll be more holidays the staff will spend…” This shows some effort to use more than simple sentence patterns. However, control is inconsistent: “I Partially agree” is not integrated into a complete, correctly punctuated sentence, and the conditional construction is faulty (“If there wll be more holidays…”). The final sentence also breaks off after “they will,” leaving its structure incomplete. Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, including the run-on opening. Practise forming complete sentences with accurate conditional patterns, such as “If workers had longer weekends, they could…,” and proofread each sentence for a clear subject, verb, and ending.

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