Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Some people thinks that working week are too much longer as due to heavy work. They are very busy due to these responsibility and they have not enough time to spend with family together.So working week should be shorter and worker should have a longer weekend. I have to explain mixed opinion about these statement.

On the one side, people are too much busy on their working area and they do not breath easily due their loaded work. They do not spend time together in the working week and they face to a high depression. In explaination, when people busy their work and their behaviour show more attitude and after busy day in angry mood to enter the home.For example some security guards such as police officers spend whole day on duty and they tired due to working week and they are not polite others such as their family members. so

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the topic and give a relevant reason for shorter working weeks: workers may be tired, stressed, and have less time with family. The example of police officers also relates to the effect of demanding work on family interactions. However, the response addresses the task only partially: “I have to explain mixed opinion” does not establish a clear position on whether you agree or disagree, and the discussion does not explain the benefits of a longer weekend or consider the opposing view. The example is brief and its connection to the proposed change is not fully explained. The response is also below the required 250 words, so there is not enough development to cover the task adequately. State your position directly, then develop and support each main reason.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response, including an opening and a paragraph beginning “On the one side,” and you use a few linking expressions such as “For example.” These help the reader recognise that you are introducing a reason and an illustration. However, the response has no clear overall progression: the opening promises a “mixed opinion,” but the body gives only one side, and the final “so” leaves the thought unfinished. Some links are unclear or mechanical, as in “In explaination,” while ideas within the paragraph move from workload to depression, behaviour, and family without explaining each connection. Use separate paragraphs for your position and main reasons, and connect each example explicitly to the argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “working week,” “responsibility,” “depression,” and “security guards,” so the reader can identify the general subject. There are also attempts to express more specific ideas, such as workers being under pressure and becoming irritable at home. However, the range is limited and several word choices or combinations are unnatural, including “too much longer,” “loaded work,” “high depression,” and “show more attitude.” These choices sometimes make the intended meaning difficult to follow. Spelling is also inaccurate in “explaination.” Build a bank of natural collocations for work and wellbeing, such as “heavy workload,” “experience stress,” and “spend quality time with family,” and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, for example, “Some people thinks that working week are too much longer as due to heavy work.” This shows an effort to explain causes, and the general topic remains understandable. However, the range of sentence structures is limited, and attempts to combine ideas often contain errors in agreement, articles, and sentence construction. Examples include “Some people thinks,” “working week are,” and “they have not enough time”; the sentence beginning “when people busy their work” is also incomplete in its grammatical pattern. Punctuation and spacing are inconsistent, particularly where sentences run together. Practise accurate basic sentence patterns first, then add subordinate clauses, checking subject–verb agreement and articles in each sentence.

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