Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-07-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

 

The diagram below shows how a biofuel called ethanol is produced.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The diagram shows how a biofuel also known as ethanol is produced.

Carbon dioxide present in a environment use by a tree also use of sunlight for their own growth. Farmers initiate harvesting of sugarcane. When a sugarcane plants are peak at it's growth then Farmers collecting them. Perform storage moreover transportation of sugarcane. Reaching of sugarcane where it's pre-processing Perform. Then occurs pre-processing of sugarcane. A processor get a cellulose as a result. Now processing of cellulose such as addition of microorganisms. Microorganisms react with sugar molecule and formation of ethanol.

Now the ethanol use as a fuel in a car , truck , aeroplanes etc. Vehicles forming of pollution as a release of carbon dioxide in atmosphere these carbon dioxide use by plants & trees.

Moral of the story all things are dependent on each others. But the major issue was the co2 release from car is in excess which affect our atmosphere.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers the main stages of the ethanol production process, from sugarcane harvesting to its use as fuel. However, the report is hampered by a lack of objective tone and the inclusion of irrelevant personal commentary. The final paragraph, which discusses the 'moral of the story' and personal opinions on carbon dioxide, is not appropriate for an Academic Task 1 report, which should remain neutral and descriptive. While the key features are identified, the lack of a clear overview and the inclusion of non-data-related opinions prevent a higher score. To improve, focus strictly on describing the process steps without adding subjective interpretations.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is organized into a sequence of steps, but the progression is often disjointed due to awkward phrasing and a lack of cohesive devices. While there is an attempt to use transition words like 'moreover' and 'then', the sentences often feel like a list of isolated points rather than a cohesive report. The paragraphing is also problematic; the final paragraph introduces a shift in focus that disrupts the logical flow of the process description. Using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would significantly improve the readability and structure of the response.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive, with several instances of awkward word choice and grammatical inaccuracies in word forms. For example, phrases like 'Farmers initiate harvesting' and 'Vehicles forming of pollution' are unnatural. There is a reliance on basic vocabulary, and some terms are used incorrectly, such as 'at it's growth' (should be 'at its peak'). To achieve a higher band, you should aim to use more precise terminology related to industrial processes, such as 'extraction,' 'fermentation,' or 'by-product,' and ensure that word forms are used correctly in context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the reader's understanding. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'Carbon dioxide... use by a tree'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack proper verb tense consistency, such as 'Reaching of sugarcane where it's pre-processing Perform.' The range of structures is limited, relying mostly on simple sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree, and practicing the use of passive voice, which is essential for describing processes in Task 1.

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