Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is important for everyone, including young people, to save money for their future.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is crucial for individuals, especially youngesters to save money for future use, i completely agree with this view beacuse they will for education perpose as well as for family support too.

The main reason why i support because of there educational use. This is beacuse of in futue young people dont have extra to pay there tution fees which thay cant be able to pay caused more concequancis in there acadmic field. For instance when my close friends dont have a money to pay then there roll number was not be issued by the college due to fee beause thay dont safe any single dollar for there future as a result thay dont allow in exam hall which cause d gread in there exam.

Anothere important reason was that with the help of these safed money thay helped there family. For example when some individuals needed some money and the younger has some extra he will help in his own home members like brothers sisters even mother or father to as result due to this kindness ever one will support him even in his hard situation same like he has done for his family by giving there all money.

In conclusion, it is very benificial for younger to safe money extra through which he helped his own family moreover his own education side that with some one dependance my point of view is that is complete a positive side of these eassy and i strongly agree with this opinion.And every youngester should apply this view in this own life.

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response6.0
Coherence and Cohesion6.0
Lexical Resource5.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy5.0
Overall5.5

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear from the opening—“i completely agree”—and you give two relevant reasons: saving for education and helping family members. The examples about unpaid college fees and supporting relatives make the response connected to the question. However, the educational example is difficult to follow in places, and the family-support point is asserted more than explained; for instance, the claim that everyone will support the young person in return could use a clearer explanation. The conclusion restates your agreement, but its wording makes the final point about education and family dependence unclear. To strengthen the response, explain each reason in a more precise sequence and show more fully how saving benefits young people’s future.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting separate reasons, and a conclusion. This helps the reader follow the main line of argument. You also use linking expressions such as “For instance,” “Another important reason,” and “In conclusion.” However, some connections are mechanical or unclear, and several sentences contain too many ideas without clear boundaries. In the first example, the sequence from not paying fees to being excluded from an exam and receiving a poor grade is hard to track. Pronouns such as “they,” “he,” and “these saved money” also make references uncertain. Use shorter, clearly ordered sentences and make each pronoun’s reference explicit to improve progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “tuition fees,” “family support,” “extra,” and “kindness,” so the reader can identify your main ideas. There are also attempts to use topic-specific expressions, such as “academic field.” However, spelling errors and inaccurate word choices are noticeable and sometimes make meaning difficult to understand: “youngesters,” “beacuse,” “concequancis,” and “safed money” are examples. Some phrases are also unnatural, including “for future use” and “helped his own home members.” Build accuracy with common collocations before trying more ambitious wording. For example, use “save for future expenses,” “pay tuition fees,” and “support family members,” and check spelling carefully during revision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including a reason clause beginning “when” and a result expressed with “as a result.” This shows an effort to connect ideas rather than relying only on short statements. However, sentence structures are often faulty, and errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and punctuation sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “they will for education” is missing a main verb, while “there roll number was not be issued” combines incompatible verb forms. The opening also joins a complete statement to “i completely agree” without appropriate sentence punctuation. Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add one subordinate clause at a time; check tense consistency and sentence boundaries.

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