Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-07-24
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
It is important for everyone, including young people, to save money for their future.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
In modern era, it is necessary for everyone, including youngsters, to save money for their future. I largely agree with this aspect, reasons are further elaborated in upcoming paragraphs.
To bigen begin with, there are plenty of reasons to agree with this aspect. Primarily, better liberty -le, this is because and financially stable which directly help them to enjoy life freely. Moreover, unexpected situations and emergency come in their life related to money they can easily tackle that. Due to this, neither they feel stress nor anxiety in mind. As a result, the more individuals start saving money for future, the more positive outcomes can be observed.
Furthermore, enjoy life freely, this is because when they had financial strong, then did not need to over work and over time, because of this, people not only spend more with family but also do other enjoyabl activities. However the first and foremost point to disagree with this aspect is that they does not enjoy their persent because basically people focus for future and forget their persent to enjoy. Due to this, either they become mentally unstable or less happy. For instance, if china does not provid the
In conclusion although, there are few points to disagree with this aspect such as focus more on future. yet there are many reasons to agree like become stable in life and freely enjoy.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt but fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you state your position clearly in the introduction, the arguments are underdeveloped and lack sufficient supporting evidence. For instance, the mention of 'China' in the second paragraph is incomplete and does not serve as a coherent example. To improve, ensure you fully explore each point with clear explanations and relevant examples. Because the response is under-length, the depth of the argument is compromised, preventing a higher score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the flow of ideas is frequently disrupted by awkward phrasing and incomplete sentences. While you use some cohesive devices like 'Furthermore' and 'In conclusion', the logical progression within paragraphs is often unclear. For example, the transition in the second paragraph is disjointed due to grammatical errors like 'better liberty -le, this is because'. To improve, focus on using cohesive devices to link complete, logical thoughts rather than just starting sentences with transition words. Paragraphing is present, but the content within the paragraphs lacks the necessary structure to guide the reader effectively.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally limited and repetitive. You rely on basic terms such as 'enjoy life' and 'good/bad' concepts without demonstrating a range of academic or precise language. There are also several instances of word-choice errors, such as 'bigen' instead of 'begin' and 'persent' instead of 'present'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to incorporate more sophisticated vocabulary related to financial management and personal development, and ensure that your spelling is accurate. The current range is sufficient for basic communication but lacks the precision required for higher-level academic writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'they does not enjoy'), sentence fragments, and incorrect word forms (e.g., 'financial strong' instead of 'financially strong'). While you attempt some complex structures, they are often faulty, leading to confusion. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and verb. Proofreading for common errors like pluralization and verb tense consistency will also help improve your accuracy significantly.
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