Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-07-28
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
It is important for everyone, including young people, to save money for their future.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
I intend to outline the major factor behind this why is important for young peoples to save money for their future.
The primary most likely cause that lead to why it is important for young peoples to save money for their future because future is uncertain there is not a one person in the world who know about his future which type of time is come on her than this is an important that save money in our present time to lead with future.
There is many type persons some peoples are says that to lead with our future problems save money in our present time because future is uncertain no one guess which type of problem happen in future to face any type of problem save money in our present time and some peoples are says that save money for future is wastage to time wastage of money because this type of peoples says that invest our money to take benefit in future this is good as compared to save the money in the some place this is good to take profit in future.
In this time when we deeply discuss about both views there both views are correct at his place both type of peoples are correct on his place because when we see both views we can see that both are good for our future.
In conclusion, we says that when we see both views both views are good for our future when we see our first view this is very help full to lead with our future problems when we see 2nd view of peoples there is risk but this is profitable for our future.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt by discussing the importance of saving money. However, the development is limited and repetitive. The student identifies two views—saving versus investing—but fails to clearly state their own position or provide a coherent argument. The ideas are presented in a circular manner, particularly in the conclusion, which merely restates that both views are 'good' without providing a nuanced synthesis or a clear personal stance. To improve, you should ensure each paragraph develops a specific point with clear supporting evidence or examples, and maintain a consistent position throughout the essay.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is weak. The use of cohesive devices is repetitive and often mechanical, such as the frequent use of 'when we see' and 'both views'. Referencing is often unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the logic. For example, the transition between the discussion of saving and investing is abrupt and lacks logical connectors. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'conversely', 'consequently') and ensure that each sentence flows naturally from the previous one.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, which hinders the expression of complex ideas. Phrases like 'many type persons' and 'wastage to time' are non-standard and indicate a restricted range of collocations. There is a lack of academic vocabulary appropriate for an IELTS Task 2 essay. To improve, you should work on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to finance and personal management, and focus on using synonyms to avoid repeating the same words throughout the text.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'some peoples are says'), pluralisation (e.g., 'young peoples'), and sentence structure. Many sentences are run-on or lack necessary punctuation, making them difficult to parse. The range of structures is very limited, relying mostly on simple, repetitive patterns. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles and prepositions, before attempting more complex structures.
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