Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-07-30

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is important for everyone, including young people, to save money for their future.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

In the modern era, high inflation makes daily life more expensive. So, people are given priority to save their income for their better future. I think it is very crucial for everybody, even the youth to save save money. In this essay, I will representing my personal stand point with suitable examples.

To commence with, people have to save their income for long term investments. In simple words, many individuals are living in renting house which is the major factor of high expenditure in renting hence, they have to buy their own home. Additionally, not only is long term investment but also its add in their own properties.

Moreover, youngsters should save money for their better education as many students want to go abroad for getting best education. To exemplify, as per a survey, last year a 60% of Indian pupils are migrating to foreign country to get top-notch education. Last but not least, if people are saving saving their income in young age which is helpful in their future such as in emergency, old ages, as well as for their children future.

On the other hand, teenagers should spent money on travelling as if they miss the opportunities they will regret it, as in young age they able to do thrilling activities which is not possible at old age due to health condition and some activities are also have age limits like surfing, scuba diving, skydiving and many more.

In conclusion, although, saving money is beneficial for financial stability, and it is also part of long term investment, people have to enjoy their hobby instead of only focusing on the save money.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response addresses the prompt by discussing the importance of saving money while acknowledging the counter-argument regarding spending on experiences. The position is clear throughout the essay. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the point about renting houses is mentioned but not fully explained in terms of how saving specifically facilitates home ownership. The example regarding Indian students is relevant but lacks a clear connection to the broader argument about saving for education. To reach a higher band, you should expand on your points with more detailed reasoning and ensure that every example directly supports your main argument.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. You use some cohesive devices such as 'To commence with', 'Moreover', and 'In conclusion' to signal the progression of your argument. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical, and there are instances where the flow between sentences is slightly disjointed, such as in the second paragraph where the transition between renting and long-term investment is abrupt. Additionally, referencing is occasionally unclear, which affects the overall readability. Improving the variety and naturalness of your linking words will help create a smoother, more professional flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'financial stability', 'inflation', and 'expenditure'. However, there are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice errors, such as 'people are given priority to save' instead of 'people prioritize saving' and 'its add in their own properties'. There are also some repetitive errors, such as the accidental repetition of words like 'save save' and 'saving saving'. To improve, focus on learning common collocations and proofreading to eliminate simple repetition errors, which will help you convey your ideas with greater precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt complex sentences, they often contain grammatical errors, such as 'not only is long term investment but also its add in their own properties' and 'as in young age they able to do'. Punctuation is generally functional, but there are errors in subject-verb agreement and article usage throughout the text. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to be noticeable. Focusing on basic sentence construction and ensuring correct verb forms will significantly improve the clarity and accuracy of your writing.

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