Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-01
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
It is important for everyone, including young people, to save money for their future.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
In recent years, it is very important for everyone, including young people to save money for their future has become a widely debated issue among people of different backgrounds. while some people believe that it is not important for everyone including young persons to the save currency for their future, I strongly agree this statement because every her person save cash for their future for their for the reason discussed below.
First and forest, one of the main reason for my opinion is all humans should save money for their future because if they save not money then not safe the future. For example,when one people goes the another country and earns money so that he should send half the money home and half money safe the future there fore when he Pakistan is ready, he can go to business in peace. As the direct result of this every one persons and young generation to collect money for their future.
Another important factor consider is some people is not save the money so they reach for tomorrow too much and think that if only we had accumulated future money, we could live a peaceful life like other people who have accumulated money for their future. For instance, many people is not save money for their future and they enjoy present time but after that they are very humble in the future.
In conclusion, for the reasons outlined above, i firmly believe that every parents they should tell their children that safe money is very important for the future.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position in favor of saving money. However, the development of ideas is limited and often repetitive. The arguments provided, such as the example of someone working in another country, are somewhat unclear and lack logical depth. While the response covers the main requirement of the task, the supporting points are under-developed, and the reasoning is frequently obscured by grammatical errors. To improve, you should focus on providing more specific, well-explained examples that directly support your main argument rather than repeating the same point in different ways.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as the awkward transition 'First and forest' (likely meant 'First and foremost'). Referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult to track the subject of the sentences. The progression of ideas is hindered by these issues, as the connection between sentences is not always logical. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words correctly and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that flows naturally into the next.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, relying on basic terms like 'save money' and 'future' throughout the text. There are several instances of word-choice errors, such as 'save currency' instead of 'save money' and 'humble' used incorrectly to describe people who have not saved money. These errors occasionally cause confusion for the reader. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a broader range of vocabulary, including synonyms and collocations related to finance and personal planning, and ensure that words are used in their correct context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'some people is not save the money'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack the necessary complexity to demonstrate a range of structures. While the meaning is generally discernible, the high frequency of errors makes the text difficult to read. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of verb tenses, before attempting more complex grammatical structures.
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