Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-03
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
It is important for everyone, including young people, to save money for their future.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
It is play a vital roll for a significant people and including teenager people, to save money for their good future.
This essay firmly support the given viewpoints and argues that is advantages is significantly outweigh any potential drawback. The following paragraph is justify the position with a relevant arguments and examples .
The primary reason for supporting this view point is that, save money it is a good habit for all age people. On the other hands it is a life save support and the have financial security in the later stages of life. I think most of the time young people are can not save there money the have use to attend rich people parts buy brand cloths because to . Every one should save there money early age.
Another important reason is that, money is a power if you do not have much as much money you will can not continue you sturdy and can not build you carious. Although money save is on kind of disadvantages because it is little bit though for young people, because there parents some time they can not give there children enough pocket money. That time is though for young people but if they do this it will be good work for young people . in comparison older, young people much strength that why save money easy to young peoples .
In conclusion, based on the arguments discussed above , this essay firmly believe money save is very vital for every people and is advantages is clearly outweigh the disadvantages.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The essay addresses the prompt by taking a clear position in favor of saving money. However, the development of ideas is limited and often repetitive. While you mention financial security and the cost of education, the arguments lack depth and specific examples. The explanation of why young people struggle to save is somewhat vague, and the connection between 'strength' and saving money in the final paragraph is unclear. To improve, you should focus on expanding your points with more detailed explanations and concrete examples rather than repeating the same general statements.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'On the other hands' and 'That time is though'. The logical progression between sentences is frequently interrupted by grammatical errors, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of your argument. The transition between the introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion is present but lacks sophistication. Improving the variety and accuracy of your linking words will help your ideas connect more naturally.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is quite limited and there are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'teenager people', 'rich people parts', and 'build you carious' (likely meaning 'career'). You rely on basic vocabulary and struggle to express more complex ideas precisely. There are also several spelling errors, such as 'sturdy' instead of 'study' and 'though' instead of 'tough'. To reach a higher band, you need to expand your range of vocabulary and focus on using words in their correct context, paying closer attention to spelling and word forms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('This essay firmly support'), incorrect verb forms ('are can not save'), and misuse of articles and pronouns ('the have use to attend'). Sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at complex sentences are often faulty, leading to confusion. For example, 'Although money save is on kind of disadvantages' is grammatically incorrect and unclear. You need to focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of prepositions before attempting more complex structures.
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