Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-15
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
It is important for everyone, including young people, to save money for their future.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
It is significant for everyone , adjusting young individual , to save money for their future . I will discuss both views in the upcoming paragraph .
On the one hand , it is important for everyone , including young people , to preserve money for their future . firstly , it is very important save money in the future . Because , people easily to buy our expensive things . like , cars , bikes etc. Secondly , young people save to money for their future to our family . Save money for the future to help children study in the best colleges and schools . Finally , there are many people thinking save money to help increase the business . So , to easily for children in the future . for example , big restaurant in the town or city.
On the other hand , there are more demerits including young people , to save money for their future . In-additionally , it is more impact to save money on the children . children not work in the future . Because , they are thinking not need to working . However , people expensive to money spent on the things . For instance , big houses , properties , Furthermore , family members not effort on the other works . all time free in the home . It is more impact on the children .
In conclusion , I will discuss both views negative or positive . But , most of the negative . To save money for the future to difficulty create for the children . children not effort on the work .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the prompt but fails to maintain a clear position. The introduction mentions discussing 'both views,' which is inappropriate for an 'extent' question that asks for your own opinion. The arguments provided are often unclear or contradictory; for example, the second paragraph argues that saving money makes children lazy, which is a weak and poorly developed point. The ideas lack logical support and the response does not clearly answer the question of whether saving is important. The content is repetitive and lacks the depth required for a higher band score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay uses basic cohesive devices like 'firstly,' 'secondly,' and 'in conclusion,' but these are often used mechanically or incorrectly. Paragraphing is present, but the internal structure of the paragraphs is weak, with sentences that do not flow logically from one to the next. The referencing is often unclear, such as in the phrase 'it is more impact to save money on the children,' where the connection between ideas is lost. The overall progression of the argument is difficult to follow due to the lack of clear topic sentences and logical transitions.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is very limited and often inaccurate. There is frequent misuse of words, such as 'adjusting' instead of 'including,' 'preserve' instead of 'save,' and 'effort' used as a verb. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas, leading to repetitive phrasing throughout the text. Many collocations are unnatural, such as 'people easily to buy our expensive things.' The student struggles to use words precisely, which frequently impedes the reader's understanding of the intended meaning.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The essay relies almost exclusively on simple sentence structures, and even these contain frequent errors. There are persistent issues with subject-verb agreement, article usage, and word order (e.g., 'people easily to buy our expensive things'). Punctuation is also problematic, with spaces before commas and periods. Complex sentence attempts are rare and usually grammatically incorrect. The high frequency of errors causes significant strain for the reader and obscures the intended message, preventing the response from reaching a higher band.
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