Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-17
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
It is important for everyone, including young people, to save money for their future.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Nowadays individuals are arguing that primary schools pay a lot of attention to the
formal methods of learning. I partially agree with this point of view, however I think
play is extremely crucial in the classroom full of primary students.
To begin with, formal learning plays an important role, since it teaches the student
about being disciplined and respectful to everyone. Discipline and respect are two
most important skills we need in our life that schools teaches us in a way of formal
learning. Getting into details, these skills make people succeed in their lives. If we look
at the example of successful( people today they all have these two qualities in common.
Moreover formal learning helps us to test the ability of a student by conducting an exam
in a formal way, which shows us how much has a student learnt and how much is the
student capable of doing.
On the other hand, I believe that too formal education is not the best way of learning.
Considering the stage of the life in which primary students belong, we need to realize
that fun is a crucial part of it. Being extremely formal blocks that fun from a student's
life. So instead of schools being strict about formal ways of learning they should
promote fun methods of teaching. For example, mind games other other video games,
colours, paints and other activities will also teach student but in a enjoyable way. These
activities will also promote the important skills such as social skills, creative skills and
other beneficial skills we need in our daily lives. Furthermore, if we consider it deeply it
will also prevent boredom and will motivate the student to have a passion for lifelong
learning. last but not the least, play in the primary classroom has a huge importance on
it's own. which gives the student this freedom to enjoy learning.
In conclusion, formal learning has it's importance till some extent but sometimes it is
a necessity to be informal. And schools should be focused at both of the methods of
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AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0
The response is completely off-topic. The prompt asks about the importance of saving money for the future, but the essay discusses the balance between formal and informal learning in primary schools. Because the student failed to address the task prompt entirely, the score is significantly impacted. While the ideas regarding education are developed and supported with examples, they do not relate to the question asked. To improve, it is essential to carefully read the prompt and ensure that the central argument directly answers the specific question posed in the task instructions.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The essay is logically organized with clear paragraphing and a consistent structure. The student uses cohesive devices such as 'To begin with,' 'Moreover,' 'On the other hand,' and 'In conclusion' to signal the progression of ideas. While the content is irrelevant to the prompt, the internal flow of the argument is coherent and easy to follow. The transition between the benefits of formal learning and the advantages of play is handled well, demonstrating a good grasp of paragraph structure and logical sequencing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The student demonstrates a sufficient range of vocabulary to express ideas clearly. Phrases like 'extremely crucial,' 'promote fun methods,' and 'lifelong learning' show a decent level of lexical control. There are some minor errors, such as 'it's' used incorrectly for the possessive 'its' and 'learnin' which is an incomplete word. However, the vocabulary is generally appropriate for the topic discussed, even if that topic is not the one assigned. The range is adequate for the task, though it lacks the sophistication required for higher bands.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The student uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'schools teaches us' (subject-verb agreement), 'two most important' (missing article), and 'it's importance' (incorrect apostrophe). Additionally, there are punctuation issues, such as the sentence fragment 'which gives the student this freedom to enjoy learning.' Despite these errors, the meaning is generally clear and the mistakes do not significantly impede communication. The student shows an ability to construct complex sentences, though accuracy remains inconsistent.
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