Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is important for everyone, including young people, to save money for their future.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

In today’s globalised world, working professionals are highly aware of market trends and career opportunities. Doctors, engineers and other skilled workers know which countries offer better salaries and professional opportunities. Some people believe that skilled professionals should work in the country where they completed their education and training, while others believe that they should be free to work in any country they choose. This essay will discuss both views and present my opinion.

To begin with, some people believe that professionals such as doctors and engineers should work in the country where they received their education and training. Governments often heavily subsidise medical, transport and educational services. If many qualified professionals leave the country, it can face a shortage of skilled workers. Moreover, these professionals have local knowledge and can use their skills to benefit the society that supported their education. For example, developing countries spend huge amounts of money on training doctors and engineers, but rural hospitals may still lack medical staff because many doctors move abroad. Therefore, governments could require such professionals to work in their home country for a limited period after completing their training.

On the other hand, others believe that professionals should be free to work in any country based on their own choices. Many individuals choose to work abroad because this provides them with higher salaries, better professional status and hands-on experience with advanced technologies and practices. Restricting their movement can be unfair because individuals may have personal or family reasons for moving to another country. For example, a skilled professional who moves to Canada or Germany may gain advanced expertise and international experience, which they could later use to benefit their home country. Therefore, individuals should have the freedom to choose where they want to work based on their career goals, job satisfaction and family circumstances.

In conclusion, I believe that professionals should generally be free to work abroad because choosing where to work is a personal right. However, governments can reasonably expect graduates who received heavily subsidised education to contribute to their home country for a limited period.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0

The response is completely off-topic. The prompt asks for an opinion on whether young people should save money for their future. However, your essay discusses the 'brain drain' phenomenon—whether skilled professionals should work in their home countries or abroad. Because you have failed to address the prompt entirely, the task achievement score is significantly impacted. While the essay itself is well-structured and logical, it does not answer the specific question provided in the instructions. To improve, ensure you carefully read the prompt and identify the core topic before beginning your outline. You must respond to the specific question asked rather than writing a pre-prepared essay on a different subject.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.5

Despite being off-topic, the essay demonstrates a high level of coherence and cohesion. You have used clear paragraphing, with each paragraph focusing on a distinct viewpoint. The use of cohesive devices such as 'To begin with', 'Moreover', 'On the other hand', and 'In conclusion' is effective and helps the reader follow the flow of your argument. The progression of ideas within each paragraph is logical and easy to track. If the content were relevant to the prompt, this would be a very strong performance in terms of structure and logical flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 7.5

You demonstrate a wide and flexible range of vocabulary. You use topic-specific terminology such as 'globalised world', 'heavily subsidise', 'qualified professionals', 'advanced expertise', and 'job satisfaction' with precision. The language is natural and sophisticated, showing a good awareness of collocation and style. There are no significant errors in word choice or spelling that impede communication. The vocabulary is well-suited to an academic context, and you successfully avoid repetition by using a variety of synonyms and related terms throughout the text.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 7.5

The grammar is excellent, with a wide range of complex structures used accurately. You successfully employ conditional sentences ('If many qualified professionals leave...'), relative clauses, and varied sentence beginnings. The majority of your sentences are error-free, and your control over punctuation is consistent. You demonstrate a high level of grammatical maturity, which allows for clear and precise expression. There are no noticeable errors that distract the reader or cause confusion. Your ability to construct complex, error-free sentences is a significant strength of your writing.

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