Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is important for everyone, including young people, to save money for their future.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

To illustrate , in this modren era expinces increasing day by day so every one need to save money for future i am strongly agree with this statements .

To start with first reason , in these days population growing sharply so therefor job opportunity decresing as a result income resurces pretty less for individuales thats why they reqire to save money to start private business or for part time private work so that why they should save money fro bright future . owing to save money for business they can earn more money with saving as a result it can help to survive batter life more over if they save money it will br batter fro there children study future invistment .

Moreover , young people reqire to to save money espesiacly for saty independ . if they save money they can use it in emenrgency fro example if they studing and there parents will be not able not pay fee becose some of reasons they can pay by self and can continue study .Furthermore

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 176 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas, as the arguments remain superficial and lack sufficient supporting evidence or examples. While you clearly state your position in the introduction, the under-length nature of the essay means that the task is only partially addressed. To improve, you must expand on your points with more detailed explanations and concrete examples to ensure a comprehensive response that meets the length requirement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay lacks a clear structure. While there is an attempt to use cohesive devices like 'To start with' and 'Moreover', the flow of ideas is often disjointed. Paragraphing is inconsistent, and the final sentence is incomplete, which disrupts the logical progression of the argument. The use of referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the train of thought. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would greatly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is quite limited and there are frequent spelling errors throughout the text, such as 'modren', 'expinces', 'decresing', 'resurces', 'individuales', and 'espesiacly'. These errors are noticeable and occasionally make the text difficult to read. The range of vocabulary is basic, and there is little evidence of an attempt to use more sophisticated or academic language. To achieve a higher band score, you need to focus on accurate spelling and expanding your range of vocabulary to include more precise, topic-specific terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement, missing articles, and incorrect sentence structure. For example, 'income resurces pretty less' and 'if they studing and there parents will be not able not pay fee'. The reliance on simple sentence structures is high, and attempts at more complex sentences are often marred by errors that impede clarity. You should focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of prepositions and articles before attempting more complex structures.

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