Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
It is important for everyone, including young people, to save money for their future.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Nowadays, it is very important for everyone, including young people, to save money for their future.
Therefore, many people waste a money for travelling other countries and other places. They have to save a money for their future. save a money is very importent for many people for their future. Because money is everything we can bought everything by money in our life.
Nowadays, many young people they can spend money with their friends they are going at big hotel or cafe and they are doing enjoy. We are saved a money in this time then in future it helps to make a future good. people save a money for their future then in future they can spend that money for doing a any kinds of business in their future.
Although, it is very important for every people , to save a money in their future we saved a money in this time then in future that money help to make our career best and better. We can saved money at bank then can gave extra money that is profit for that people.
Therefore, i was agree with this statement because it is very important for every people, to save money for their future used. Nowadays, the parents save their kids money at banks for their future. In future they spend that money for there business or other uses. i was agree for this extent, when my home my relitives was came then they are gave money for me to eat breakfast. I was saved that money for my future used. Like this many clildren also save money then in future they earn many money by this money.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by discussing the importance of saving money for the future, particularly for young people, and clearly states a position ('Therefore, i was agree with this statement'). However, the development of ideas is repetitive and limited. The writer repeatedly asserts that saving money is important for business or general future security without introducing diverse supporting arguments or fully exploring the implications. While all parts of the task are addressed, the lack of depth and recurring over-generalizations place this response at Band 5.0 according to the task response descriptors.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The essay displays some basic organization with clear stance signals like 'Therefore' and 'Although'. However, there is no clear overall progression of ideas, and paragraphs lack cohesive unity, often jumping erratically between different points, such as personal anecdotes about relatives giving money for breakfast. Cohesive devices are frequently misused or repetitive, particularly the overuse of words like 'Nowadays', 'In future', and 'save a money'. Paragraphing is also erratic and does not effectively guide the reader through a logical argument, fitting the Band 4.0 to 5.0 range.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and frequently repetitive ('save money', 'future', 'business'). There are persistent word-form and collocation errors, such as 'waste a money', 'bought everything by money', 'doing enjoy', and 'earn many money'. The range is limited and minimally adequate for conveying very simple ideas, but noticeable errors in word choice cause strain for the reader throughout, aligning well with the Band 4.0 lexical descriptors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The writing demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences predominate, and attempts at complex structures are almost entirely faulty, such as 'When my home my relitives was came then they are gave money for me to eat breakfast.' There are frequent and persistent errors in tense, article usage, prepositions, and subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'every people , to save a money', 'we can bought'). These frequent errors consistently impede fluency and occasionally distort meaning, reflecting Band 4.0 criteria.
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