Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
It is important for everyone, including young people, to save money for their future.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
According to the statement it is crucial for everyone,addition young people,to save money for their future.From my opinion and experience,i am agree with this statement.The details and examples in the second paragraph.
First reason is that many young people every needs in the country.To save the money in future.Because the young people work in difficult time.Young people does not rest in difficult time.They work in difficult time and earn the money.For example one young people who are the difficult time in the life.He does not rest in their home.Because the children needs money for their school fees and etc.So,the young people is the best to save money for their future.
Second reason is that many young people drink sharab,sigrat,ice etc.He does not respect to the elder people.And the behaviour does not better in the female.So,my knowledge and experience many young people work in all days.He does not drink in sharab.So,in present young people life destroy because he is bad habits.So,we should young people work in all time,all days.And earn money to save their future.When young people work in every time,he respect to the elder people and save money to their future.
To sum up,young people is the better to save money for their future.He works in all time and respect to the elder people.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count of 250 words, coming in at only 214 words, which negatively impacts the task achievement score. Furthermore, the content wanders significantly off-topic into moral judgments about young people drinking alcohol (e.g., 'drink sharab, sigrat, ice etc.') and respecting elders, rather than focusing purely on the economic arguments for saving money. While the writer attempts to take a position ('i am agree with this statement'), the ideas are heavily underdeveloped, repetitive, and lack clear logical support. Examples given are confusing and incomplete, such as 'For example one young people who are the difficult time in the life.' Overall, the response addresses the prompt only partially and superficially.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The essay is divided into short paragraphs, but the organization and progression of ideas are severely hampered by poor cohesion and fragmented sentence structures. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, relying on repetitive transitions like 'First reason is that', 'Second reason is that', and 'So'. Paragraphing is attempted, but the paragraphs contain disjointed sentences that make it difficult to follow a clear line of argument. Referencing pronouns (such as 'he' used indiscriminately for young people) are frequently unclear, leading to confusion regarding who or what is being discussed throughout the response.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
Lexical resource is very basic and repetitive. The student uses a limited vocabulary pool, repeatedly recycling words like 'young people', 'money', 'future', 'work', and 'difficult time'. There are inappropriate inclusions of non-standard or first-language vocabulary ('sharab', 'sigrat') which are not suitable for an Academic IELTS response. Word choice and collocations are frequently unnatural, and there are noticeable errors in word forms and parts of speech (e.g., 'i am agree', 'the behaviour does not better in the female'). The vocabulary is barely adequate to communicate simple ideas and strains the reader.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
Grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple, repetitive sentence patterns that are frequently faulty. There is a complete lack of control over complex structures. Errors in basic grammar are pervasive throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('many young people every needs', 'Young people does not rest', 'child needs'), incorrect verb tenses, missing articles, and severe punctuation errors. These frequent grammatical errors cause considerable difficulty for the reader and occasionally distort the intended meaning entirely.
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