Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
It is important for everyone, including young people, to save money for their future.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
Nowadays money is more important for our living. Each things in daily used to buy them with money. Therefore, I totally agree every one to save money for our future and any need. Money is much important to save them any needs such as time of difficulty, shopping purposes and at any time we have need them.
Firstly discuss about at any difficult time such as emergency need to required a money. If anyone in our family have admitting in hospital to required a money for our treatment. Do have save money for our need you can send them at the time of emergency.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The student attempts to address the prompt by expressing total agreement with the statement that everyone should save money for the future, mentioning general reasons such as emergencies and shopping. However, the response falls severely short of the minimum length requirement, containing only 104 words compared to the required 250 words. Consequently, the ideas are heavily underdeveloped and lack the necessary extension and examples expected for Task 2. This lack of development and brevity restricts the score for this criterion, as the response cannot be considered a fully realized essay.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The text demonstrates a basic attempt at organisation by introducing the topic in the first paragraph and attempting to start a body paragraph with 'Firstly discuss about'. However, the overall progression is heavily disrupted by the extremely short length and lack of structured paragraphs. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, such as the awkward transitions and faulty referencing ('send them at the time of emergency'). Paragraphing is incomplete and inadequate for an academic essay, leading to a fragmented reading experience.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, relying heavily on simple terms like 'money', 'time', and 'need'. There are noticeable word choice and collocation errors, such as 'Each things in daily used to buy them' and 'have admitting in hospital to required a money'. These lexical limitations and frequent inaccuracies cause strain for the reader and prevent the demonstration of a sufficient range for academic writing, staying firmly within the lower bands.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting almost entirely of simple sentences marred by frequent, severe errors. Examples include 'Each things in daily used to buy them with money' and 'If anyone in our family have admitting in hospital to required a money for our treatment.' These persistent errors in verb forms, subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure frequently distort the meaning and make the text difficult to follow. Complex structures are attempted unsuccessfully.
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