Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-03
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
It is important for everyone, including young people, to save money for their future.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Money is the most important for the humans because they do not fulfil their need without money. It is believed that young people should be saved money for the future. I strongly agree with this statement but with some extent for which vindication would be elaborated in the upcoming paragraphs.
To commence with, there are several agree points of association with it. The first and foremost is, treatment. To explain it, some time individuals suffered from any disease then they have need a lot of money for their better treatment. Furthermore, mankinds get their expences easily. For example, if humans save money for their future then they can easily fulfil thier need by the help of money.
Moving further, the another point is, get facilities for their generation. To elaborate it, denizens get all facilitise to their children such as education and good clothes. And they can open thier business in the future. Therefore, savings are more beneficial for the future.
On the other hand, there are many disagree points of save money. One of the prominent is, some time humans do not complete their education because they do not spent money on education. And they lost a lot of opportunities. Furthermore, they do not spent money in their business than the business become fall rapidly. And the people do not complete their hobbies because they do not spend money. Hence, if dwellers do not know the future happenings such as died after died the savings of humans should be extinct than human can enjoy their life and fulfil their all need.
In conclusion, after taking all aspects in my consideration. I would like to emphasize that youngsters save money for the future such as for treatment, they can easily handle bad time and get facilities to their chldren in the future. But do not forget the the disgaree points of save money for future.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt by expressing a clear position of agreement regarding saving money for the future, and presents relevant ideas such as medical treatments and providing for children. However, the development of these ideas is limited and under-developed, with simplistic explanations and repetitive supporting points. For instance, the discussion on why people disagree with saving money becomes somewhat confused and lacks clear elaboration. To reach a higher standard, the writer needs to extend the arguments with fully explained examples and maintain a more thorough exploration of both sides of the issue rather than relying on brief, generalised statements.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
There is a basic logical organisation to the essay, with an introduction, body paragraphs addressing different viewpoints, and a conclusion. However, there is no clear overall progression of ideas, and the logical flow is frequently hindered by mechanical and repetitive use of cohesive devices, such as 'To commence with', 'Moving further', and 'On the other hand'. Referencing is also occasionally unclear, particularly when transitioning between ideas in the body paragraphs. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal structure of the paragraphs requires more sophisticated linking and referencing to guide the reader smoothly through the arguments.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is limited and minimally adequate for the task, with noticeable errors that occasionally cause difficulty for the reader. The writer attempts some less common vocabulary, but these attempts are often marred by word choice, collocation, and word form errors, such as 'saved money' instead of 'saving money', 'agree points of association', and 'mankinds get their expences easily'. Furthermore, there are multiple spelling and lexical inaccuracies throughout the text, including 'expences', 'thier', 'facilitise', 'spent' instead of 'spend', and 'died after died', which reflect a basic and restricted lexical range.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writing demonstrates a limited range of structures, relying mostly on simple sentences alongside frequent attempts at complex structures that are often faulty. There are frequent grammatical errors relating to verb forms, tenses, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions, such as 'they do not fulfil their need', 'some time individuals suffered', and 'the business become fall rapidly'. Punctuation and article usage are also inconsistent, with fragments and awkward sentence constructions appearing throughout the text. These frequent errors require the reader to occasionally exert effort to understand the intended meaning.
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