Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is important for everyone, including young people, to save money for their future.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays, i think money is very important for everyone life. i completely agree that money is important for everyone inculding young people and they have to save for their good future.

firstly, money is the most powerful things in this world and we have to save money because of our better future and if we save the money it will be useful when we are in difficult situations. if we are geeting sick and jobless at that time also easy to survive if you save the money when you have.

secondly, saving money is very important for young people because they have a goal they have to achieve them and also they may need for their own expense like education,travelling or buy new clothes going to outdoor to visti new place while money teach them to how to face your hard time and how to manage your responsibility.

in couclusion, i strongly agree that everyone have to save money and achieve their goals. do best for your future. when you save your money its help your many hard time to get over it. that's why everyone have save their money.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

Your position is clear: you completely agree that people, including young people, should save. You give relevant reasons, such as having money during illness or unemployment and paying for education or travel. However, the response only partially develops these ideas: the examples are listed rather than explained, and the point about saving helping young people manage responsibility is unclear. The conclusion repeats your opinion without adding a developed final insight. The response is also 60 words below the required minimum, which limits the space available to explain and support your reasons. To strengthen the response, develop each main point with a specific example and explain how it demonstrates the value of saving.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs signalled by “firstly” and “secondly,” and a conclusion. These markers help the reader identify the main sections. However, progression within the paragraphs is limited: several ideas are joined in long strings with repeated “and” or “also,” so the relationship between points is not always clear. For example, the second body paragraph moves from goals to expenses, travel, clothes, and responsibility without explaining how these ideas connect. The conclusion also repeats earlier claims. Use clearer topic sentences, separate supporting points, and connect each example directly to its main idea to create a more consistent progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use enough basic vocabulary to communicate the central ideas, including “save money,” “difficult situations,” “education,” and “achieve their goals.” However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, particularly “money,” “save,” and “future.” Some choices are inaccurate or unclear, such as “the most powerful things in this world” and “going to outdoor to visti new place,” which make parts of the message harder to understand. Spelling errors such as “inculding,” “geeting,” and “couclusion” also reduce accuracy. Build a wider set of precise expressions for financial security and future plans, and check spelling and collocations when revising.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, the range is limited, and longer sentences often contain several grammatical problems. For example, “if we are geeting sick and jobless at that time also easy to survive” lacks a clear main clause, while “everyone have to save” has subject–verb disagreement. There are also errors with articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries, as in “everyone life” and the lower-case “i” after full stops. These frequent errors sometimes make the reader work to understand your meaning. Practise building accurate sentences with one main idea, then add subordinate clauses only when you can control their structure.

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