Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The given oie charts and bar charts illustrates Tupes of dance classes teenagers and their location in a city in Australia are currently attending.
Oberall, it can be seen in pie chart private studios acquire highest dance classes while location of college nased studios has lowest dance classes in town. on bar charts showed Ballet dance classes is widely popular in under 11 years old children whereas Morden dance classes popular in 11 to 16 years old child.
In first chart, private studios dance classes respectively represents around half of percentage by location meanwhile Community halls & other and school halls acquired 18% and 24%. However college based studios represent lowest 10% percentages by location.
In second chart, The bar charts showed three different types of dance classes according their popularity in age wise. under 11 years old children around 600 students joins ballet dance classes it's showed highest number of students over the information. while tap dance joins around 450 students and morden dance classes choose 300 students.
However 11 to 16 years old 530 students choose modern dance classes. wich is highly popular in this age . also about 420 students join the tap dance classes and 300 students joins ballet dance classes.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0
You cover both charts and identify the main patterns: private studios account for the largest share of class locations, college-based studios the smallest, and the most popular dance style differs by age group. The figures you report are generally consistent with the chart, including the location percentages and the student totals; 530 for modern classes among 11–16-year-olds is a reasonable reading of the approximate bar value. This gives the response a clear overview supported by relevant details. To strengthen the report further, make comparisons more explicit—for example, contrast the age groups across all three styles, noting that ballet is higher among under-11s while modern is higher among older students, and tap is similar in both groups. Avoid vague claims such as “highest number of students over the information.”
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5
The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for the location chart and age-group data. This helps the reader follow the two visual elements, and transitions such as “In first chart” and “In second chart” signal the change in focus. However, some links are mechanical or unclear, and several sentences run together, particularly in the final paragraph. The repeated use of “however” does not always express a contrast, while “while” and “also” sometimes connect ideas loosely. For stronger progression, group each age group’s figures in a parallel way and use clear comparison links such as “by contrast” or “whereas.” More consistent sentence boundaries would also make the organisation easier to follow.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “private studios,” “community halls,” “percentage,” “popular,” and the names of the dance styles, so the reader can understand the subject. However, the range of reporting language is limited, and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or awkward, such as “acquire highest dance classes,” “dance classes joins,” and “widely popular.” Spelling errors—including “oie,” “Tupes,” “Oberall,” “Morden,” and “wich”—also reduce precision. Aim to use standard chart-reporting phrases consistently, such as “account for,” “the proportion,” “the number of students taking,” and “was the most popular.” Check spelling carefully, especially for key terms and words repeated throughout the report.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response attempts some longer sentences, including comparisons introduced with “whereas” and “while,” but control is limited and many sentences contain errors. Subject–verb agreement is inconsistent in examples such as “The given … charts … illustrates” and “300 students joins”; articles and plural forms are also often missing or incorrect. Some clauses are joined without clear punctuation, as in “it’s showed highest number of students over the information. while tap dance joins…,” making the sentence structure difficult to follow. Most sentences rely on simple patterns, and attempts to combine ideas are often faulty. Practise accurate basic sentence forms first, then build comparisons with controlled clauses—for example, “Ballet attracted 600 under-11s, compared with 300 students aged 11–16.”
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