Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The specific pie chart illustrates the distribution and catagories of dancers across a town in Austailia.

The majority of studios are private covering almost fourty eight percent of the total dance studios.While,college-based studios are least in term of numbers having a only ten percent stake.Meanwhile,School halls are second in terms of classes loaction but they are only available after the school.Community halls and all others also have an significant contribution kept at eighteen percent of total.

The different types of classes have a significant number of individuals under the age of eleven specifically in ballet having highest number of people raning a little above six hundered.The tap dance classes has the second highest number of pupils under eleven entertaining almost four sixty of them.Whereas,the modern classes has fewest of them having only three hundered in total.

The both ballet and tap have greater numbers in terms of learners under eleven where as modern have greater number in people above eleven.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover both charts and identify several relevant features, including private studios as the largest location category, college-based studios as the smallest, and the contrasting age patterns for modern dance. The figures for the location chart are generally accurate. However, the comparison of dance types is incomplete: you report the under-11 figures but give little detail about the 11–16 group, whose leading class is modern at about 520, followed by tap and ballet. Your final comparison captures the broad pattern, but “greater numbers” would be clearer with supporting figures. Also, “almost four sixty” is unclear and does not accurately express the chart’s approximate figure of 450. A fuller account of both age groups and a clearer overview would make the key comparisons more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a coherent overall arrangement: it first describes class locations, then the dance types, and ends with a comparison between age groups. This makes the main topic easy to follow. You also use linking expressions such as “Meanwhile,” “Whereas,” and “The both,” although some are awkward or do not clearly connect the ideas. For example, the final sentence introduces a useful comparison but would be easier to follow if it explicitly contrasted each dance type and age group. Several ideas are crowded into long sentences, and punctuation after transitions is inconsistent. Use clearer paragraphing and more precise links between the chart features so that the progression feels less mechanical and the comparisons are easier to track.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a reasonable range of task-related vocabulary, including “distribution,” “majority,” “contribution,” and “learners,” and the reader can generally understand the information. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “a ten percent stake,” “classes location,” and “entertaining almost four sixty of them.” Spelling errors, including “catagories,” “Austailia,” “loaction,” and “hundered,” also reduce precision. Some expressions are unnecessarily elaborate where a direct chart description would be clearer. Aim for accurate, conventional language for proportions and quantities—for example, “accounted for 10%” and “approximately 450 students”—and check spelling carefully. This would make your vocabulary more precise and appropriate to an academic summary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including contrast clauses beginning with “While” and “Whereas,” and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, some grammatical errors affect clarity and control. Examples include “having a only ten percent stake,” where the article and word order are faulty, and “The tap dance classes has,” where the plural subject does not agree with the verb. “The both ballet and tap” also has an incorrect determiner structure, while “modern have greater number” lacks appropriate agreement and an article. Sentence boundaries and commas are sometimes mishandled, particularly around “While” and “Whereas.” Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, articles, and punctuation in complex sentences, while keeping comparisons in clear, complete clauses.

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