Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The charts provide information about the location and types of dances attend by young participants in Australia. Overall, it is apparent that private studios are most common place for dance practice while ballet is most common in under 11 years old participants and modern among 11-16 years old participants. However, there is slight difference between participants of both age groups.

Firstly, private studios are the most common for dance practice which is accounted for 48% while college-based studios is very less as compared to other which is 10%. In addition, after school time hall use for dance practice which is under the quarter while the community halls are use slightly less than school halls.

Secondly, ballet dance dance participants under 11 are approximately 600 and 11-16 years old is half than. Furthermore, under 11 and 11-16 years old students of tap dance students are approximately 450 and 425 respectively. Similarly, modern dance students are nearly 520 of 11-16 years old and under 11 years old students are nearly 300.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover both charts and give a clear overview: private studios are the largest location category, while ballet leads among under-11s and modern among 11–16-year-olds. Most figures are reported accurately, including the 48% and 10% location shares and the approximate dance-class numbers. The comparison that tap participation is similar across the age groups is also supported by the chart, though it could be stated more explicitly. Some details are less fully developed: the location paragraph describes the school-hall and community-hall shares vaguely rather than reporting their 24% and 18% values, and “slight difference” does not clearly identify the contrast between age groups. A more precise overview and fuller comparison of the key figures would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a coherent overall arrangement: an introduction and overview are followed by one paragraph on locations and another on dance types. Sequencing words such as “Firstly,” “Secondly,” “Furthermore,” and “Similarly” help readers follow the information. However, some connections are mechanical, and the progression within the location paragraph is not always clear: “In addition” introduces another category without making the comparison explicit. The overview’s “slight difference” is also vague, so the reader has to infer which age-group contrast matters. Use clearer comparison links, such as “by contrast” for ballet and modern, and group related figures in a more deliberate order. This would make the organisation more fluent while preserving the useful paragraph structure.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough topic vocabulary to communicate the main categories, including “private studios,” “college-based studios,” “ballet,” and “participants.” There is some variation in how you describe the data, with phrases such as “most common” and “approximately.” However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward, including “types of dances attend,” “most common place for dance practice,” and “college-based studios is very less.” Repetition of “dance practice” and “students” also limits flexibility. Choose precise chart language such as “accounted for,” “participation,” and “the least popular location,” and check word forms and collocations. These changes would make the descriptions more natural and precise without requiring unusually advanced vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex forms, including a contrast with “while” and a comparison using “as compared to.” The overall meaning is generally recoverable, but errors in agreement, articles, and sentence construction recur. For example, “college-based studios is” should use a plural verb, and “the most common place” needs an article or a plural construction. In “11–16 years old is half than,” the comparison is incomplete and grammatically unclear; a complete form would be “the figure for 11–16-year-olds is half that.” Some sentences also combine several figures without a clear grammatical frame. Practise accurate comparative structures and subject–verb agreement, then proofread each sentence for complete clauses and punctuation.

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