Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

This pie chart illustrates the information of young people in Australia's town attending dance classes and their location.

Overall, The majority of dance classes locations are private studios and majority age of Ballet in which age group is under 11 with maximum number of 600 children's.

The private studios have proportion of 48% people taking dance classes. on second school halls which conducted after school have 24%. While community halls and other have 18% and least one is college based studios with 10%.

The dance type Ballet have 600 students who are under 11 and 300 students aged 11 - 16. Tap number of students are more than 450 estimated and age group is under 11 and more than 400 age group is 11-16. The modern dance number of students in this type the age group 11-16 looks more intrested and under 11 age group is about 300 which is lower as compare with others.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover both charts and identify the main location pattern: private studios are the largest share, while college-based studios are the smallest. You also report several relevant comparisons across dance styles and age groups, including the ballet figures and the lower under-11 figure for modern dance. However, the overview is not fully accurate or clear: saying the “majority” of classes are in private studios overstates a 48% share, and the claim that under-11 ballet is the maximum overlooks that this is only the highest figure within one age-and-style comparison; under-11 tap is also higher than the older group. The tap figures are imprecise, and the modern comparison lacks the older group’s approximate value. A clearer overview and more precise comparisons would strengthen coverage.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate discussion of the location and dance-type data. This makes the information generally easy to follow, and comparisons such as 600 versus 300 for ballet help connect the figures. However, progression is sometimes weakened by awkward or unclear links. “On second” does not clearly introduce the next-largest category, while “While” begins a fragment-like continuation rather than a fully connected comparison. The final sentence combines several points without clearly stating the older group’s modern figure. Organise the body into two focused paragraphs and use precise links such as “by comparison” or “whereas” to show how the age groups differ.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportion,” “age group,” “students,” and “conducted after school,” so the reader can understand the topic and most comparisons. There are also attempts to describe ranking, such as “least one” and “more interested.” However, several choices are unnatural or imprecise for reporting data: “the information of young people,” “majority age of Ballet,” and “Tap number of students are more than 450 estimated” make the meaning less fluent. Spelling errors such as “intrested” also reduce accuracy. Aim for standard data-reporting collocations and avoid describing students as “interested” when the chart only shows attendance numbers.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer comparisons, and the main figures are usually understandable. However, grammatical control is uneven, particularly in sentence construction and agreement. For example, “The dance type Ballet have 600 students” has incorrect subject–verb agreement, and “Tap number of students are more than 450 estimated” is not a well-formed sentence. The overview also contains a sentence fragment-like construction: “The majority of dance classes locations are private studios and majority age of Ballet…” Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, including the unnecessary capital in “Overall, The” and the lower-case start after a full stop in “classes. on second.” Practise complete, clearly structured sentences and check articles, plurals, and verb agreement.

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