Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given pie chart and bar chart illustrates the comparison between the number of individuals practicing for dance at various places and number participants in various categories of dance classes.

Overall, most of the dance classes are held in private studios. A large number(i.e. about 600) of under 11 students takes part in ballet dance classes which dominates the number of rest of the classes.

Most of the students like to take dance classes in private studios. This number is about 48% of the total and therefore dominates the rest of the places where other dance classes are held. Whereas the less number of students i.e. 10% are like to take dance classes in college based studio.

Furthermore, about 300 students from 11 to 16 years old takes place in ballet dance and about 410 students participates in tap dance, meanwhile, almost210 students yakes modern dance classes. Whereas, about 600 students of under 11 category takes place in ballet dance, whereas, roughly 450 students participates in tap dance, meanwhile, 300 students joins modern dance classes.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover both charts and give a relevant overview, identifying private studios as the leading location and under-11 ballet as the largest class group. Most figures are reported accurately: for example, you give 48% for private studios and about 600 under-11 ballet students. However, the overview is incomplete because it does not identify the contrasting age-group pattern: modern is most popular among 11–16-year-olds, while ballet leads among younger students. There is also a significant data error: the chart shows about 520 older students in modern, not “almost 210.” The location discussion focuses mainly on the highest and lowest shares, leaving the 24% and 18% categories unreported. Selecting the main contrasts more fully and checking figures against the chart would make the summary more complete and precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview and separate paragraphs for location and dance types. This helps the reader follow the two charts. However, progression within the body is weakened by repeated information: private studios are described as the majority in both the overview and the next paragraph, and the age-group figures are presented in a long sequence rather than organised around clear comparisons. Connectors such as “Whereas,” “Furthermore,” and “meanwhile” are sometimes used mechanically or in ways that do not clearly signal the relationship between points. For example, the final paragraph would be clearer if it directly contrasted the age groups for each dance style. Use fewer repeated statements and group related figures into concise comparisons.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a reasonable range of task-related vocabulary, including “dominates,” “categories,” “participants,” and “private studios,” so the main subject is generally clear. However, several word choices and collocations are awkward or inaccurate, such as “individuals practicing for dance,” “takes place in ballet dance,” and “the less number of students.” These expressions make the report less natural and sometimes obscure whether you mean attendance or the location of classes. There are also spelling and typing errors, including “yakes” and “almost210.” Aim for precise chart language such as “attend classes,” “the number of students,” and “the proportion,” and proofread carefully. More accurate collocations would improve clarity without requiring unusually advanced vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including clauses linked with “whereas” and “meanwhile,” and the overall meaning is usually understandable. Some grammatical errors remain, particularly with subject–verb agreement and sentence construction. For example, “The given pie chart and bar chart illustrates” should use a plural verb, while “300 students … takes place” and “450 students participates” have agreement errors and an unsuitable grammatical pattern. The sentence beginning “Whereas the less number…” is also a fragment rather than a complete comparison. Work on matching verbs to plural subjects and forming complete sentences around comparisons. A few carefully controlled complex sentences would be more effective than linking several figures with repeated conjunctions.

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