Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The two charts provide information regarding the location and types of dance classes young people attending in australia at present.In general,there are a few significant similarties in the data.

An analysis of the chart indicates that location of dance classes in community halls and others are 18% of young people, than in private studios 48% a large share in data, and in the school halls after school its 24% its records second top,least scored was college-based studios with 10% only.

Further examintaion of the bar chart shows that types of dance class by different age group number young people under 11 years take part in modern dance are 300 and adults age between 11 to 16 years are 520.Then adults take part in tap 450 of 11 years and 420 of 11 to 16 years, ballet dance participants are 620 of 11 years and 300 of 11 to16 years. under 11 topped in ballet and 11to16 topped in modern.

Over,all the pattern display more differences than similarties bewteen the locations and types of dances by different age groups.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify both charts and report several relevant figures, including the largest location share (private studios, 48%) and the age-group contrasts in ballet and modern dance. However, the overview is unclear: “a few significant similarities” is not supported by the data, and the final claim that there are more differences than similarities does not summarise the main patterns precisely. Some figures are also misreported: under-11 ballet is about 600, not 620, and the tap figures are reversed—the chart shows about 450 under-11s and 420 aged 11–16. The location comparisons are listed, but the dance-type comparisons are not consistently accurate or fully explained. A clearer overview and careful checking of age-group labels would make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph about locations, a paragraph about dance types, and a concluding overview. This makes the information broadly easy to follow. However, progression within sentences is sometimes awkward, as in “community halls and others are 18% … than in private studios 48%,” where the comparison is not clearly constructed. “Further examination” signals a new chart, but the paragraph then moves between styles and age groups without a consistent order. The final sentence repeats the idea of similarities and differences rather than drawing together the key findings. Use a clearer sequence—first compare locations, then compare each dance style across the two age groups—and connect comparisons explicitly.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “location,” “private studios,” “participants,” and “age group,” and attempt more formal reporting phrases such as “An analysis of the chart indicates.” However, the range is limited and several choices or forms are inaccurate, which makes parts of the report less clear. For example, “adults” is unsuitable for people aged 11–16, “least scored” is not a natural way to describe the smallest share, and “topped” is informal in this context. There are also spelling errors such as “similarties” and “examintaion.” Aim for precise chart language such as “accounted for,” “the highest figure,” and “students aged 11–16,” and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, and the response is generally recognisable as a report. However, grammatical control is inconsistent, with errors in sentence construction, agreement, articles, and punctuation. For example, “young people attending in australia at present” lacks a clear relative structure, while “location … are 18%” has a subject–verb agreement problem. The sentence beginning “Then adults take part in tap” is difficult to interpret because its comparisons are not formed clearly. Missing spaces after full stops and inconsistent capitalisation also affect punctuation. Practise building accurate comparison sentences, for example, “About 600 children under 11 took ballet, compared with 300 students aged 11–16,” and proofread each sentence for a complete subject and verb.

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