Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The charts provide information about the place and classes of young people in a town in Australia are recently attending.

Overall, the highest number of people attend dance classes in private studios, the percentage of those people who are appear for dance classes at school halls (after scool) is half of private studios and less people go to community halls and other places, whereas, there are total three type of class for both groups the proportion of students is varied in each class by age.

Initially, there are four major locations where dance learners attend their class, the highest number of people go to private studios are 48%, by following this 24% individuals attend their classes at school halls after school time, while 18%, and 10 people community halls & other place and college based studios respectively.

In cintrast, the dominant group of Ballet dacne class is 600 by under 11 years old students, although the modern dance class attend dominantly by 11 to 16 years, approximately 530, while under 11 years old learners are accounted for 300, But there is less difference among both groups to attend tap dance class such as the under dance learners are abput 430 while 11-16 year are 400 in this class.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover both charts and identify several important features: private studios are the most common location at 48%, school halls account for 24%, and ballet is most popular among under-11s while modern is strongest among 11–16-year-olds. These comparisons show a relevant understanding of the data. However, some details are unclear or inaccurate: the location figures are percentages, not “10 people,” and the tap figures are approximately 450 and 420, rather than about 430 and 400. The overview also says the proportion of students varies by age, but does not clearly summarise the main contrast across all three dance styles. Make the overview more precise and check each figure against the chart.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for the location and age-group data. This helps the reader follow the two charts, and phrases such as “Overall” and “In contrast” signal the intended organisation. However, progression within sentences is sometimes difficult to follow, particularly in the overview’s long comparison and the location sentence beginning “the highest number of people go to private studios.” Some linking is also mechanical or not fully suited to the relationship being expressed. Use shorter, clearly organised sentences and group related figures together—for example, report the four location shares in a direct comparison, then compare the age groups across each dance style.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “dominant,” “accounted for,” and “attend,” and the reader can generally understand the comparisons you intend. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward, such as “people who are appear for dance classes,” “dance learners,” and “the dominant group of Ballet dacne class.” Spelling errors, including “scool,” “cintrast,” “dacne,” and “abput,” also reduce precision. Aim for a smaller set of natural, accurate expressions such as “students attending classes,” “the largest share,” and “the number of participants.” Check spelling carefully, especially in key terms and figures, so vocabulary does not distract from the data.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “although” and “while,” and you use some comparative structures to describe the charts. However, errors in sentence construction and agreement sometimes make the meaning hard to follow. For example, “the place and classes … are recently attending” does not form a clear grammatical relationship, while “the highest number of people go to private studios are 48%” combines incompatible structures. The overview also contains a long sentence with unclear clause boundaries, and capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent. Build each comparison around a clear subject and verb, and use shorter sentences when reporting several figures. This will improve accuracy while retaining variety.

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