Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The provided pie and bars graphs give information about proportions of locations of dance class and number of students participate in different types of dance in a town in Australia.

Overall, the private studio records substantial proportion of dance class but the college based hall accounts less proportion of dance class place. Contrarily, in the bars graph the majority of students under 11 in ballet type of dance and less in modren type same as in ballet from 11 to 16.

A glance at the pie chart reveals that the young people visit private studio is 48% and 24% school students go to dance class in the school hall. However, the community hall and college based studios cover by 18% and 10% respectively.

As regards the bar graph the ballet types dance learn by 600 under 11 students and 300 are 11 to 16 but 300 students under 11 in the modern type and 510 student are 11 to 16 year old.Although, the tap type dance class has almost equal number of students of under 11 and from 11 to 16.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover both charts and give a relevant overview, identifying private studios as the largest location share and college-based studios as the smallest. You also note the strong contrast in ballet participation by age and the near-equal tap figures. Most reported values match the chart: the location percentages are accurate, and the dance figures are generally close. However, the overview is not fully precise: saying under-11s are “less in modern” is true within that age group, but the comparison with older students is important because modern is higher among 11–16-year-olds. The claim that older students have “less” ballet is also unclear without specifying the comparison. Include the modern figures and make the age-group contrasts explicit to develop the summary more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for the pie chart and bar chart. This makes the two sources easy to distinguish, and phrases such as “Overall,” “A glance at the pie chart,” and “As regards the bar graph” signal the progression. However, some linking is mechanical or awkward, particularly “Contrarily” and “Although” at the start of the final sentence, where the relationship between ideas is not clear. The final paragraph also combines several comparisons in a long sentence, making the information harder to follow. Use simpler, more precise transitions and organise the bar-chart details by age group or dance type so each comparison is clearly connected.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of chart vocabulary, including “proportions,” “accounts,” “majority,” and “almost equal,” and the reader can generally understand the intended comparisons. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “proportion of dance class,” “college based hall,” and “students participate in different types of dance.” There are also spelling errors in “modren” and inconsistent forms such as “studio” versus “studios.” These issues make the description less precise, even though the main meaning remains accessible. Aim for standard data-reporting phrases such as “share of classes held at…” and “number of students taking each type of dance,” and check spelling and compound forms before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including a contrast with “but” and a clause introduced by “Although.” The main information is usually understandable, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “the young people visit private studio is 48%” has an unclear sentence structure, while “the ballet types dance learn by 600 under 11 students” uses an incorrect passive construction. Agreement and number are also inconsistent in “510 student are 11 to 16 year old,” and punctuation is missing before “Although.” These errors sometimes make relationships between figures difficult to interpret. Practise forming clear comparison sentences with accurate subjects and verbs, for example, “Private studios account for 48% of classes” and “600 children under 11 take ballet.”

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