Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie chart provides data on the location in which young people in a town in Australia are taking dance classes and the table illustrates information on categories of dance classes by various age group.

Overall highest location of dance classes are attending by people are on private studios and lowest number of location attened are based in college studios. In addition ballet dance are attended by people under 11 age mostly whereas modern dances are mostly taken by people age range between 11 to 16.

Looking at the pie-chart most popular location of dance class is private studios which is 48% also after-school, school halls are second popular place which is 24%. Least attended location is college based studios in which 10% people are attended there.

Turning to the table around 600 people under 11 years old are learning ballet dance likewise roughly 510 people are learning modern dance which age range is from 11 to 16. Tap dance classes are attended by mix age group upto 16 yaers old. Also among the number of people attending this dance class, under 11 age group people are around 450 in number and roughly 420 people are in 11-16 age range.

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response6.5
Coherence and Cohesion6.5
Lexical Resource5.5
Grammatical Range and Accuracy5.5
Overall6.0

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover both visuals and identify the main patterns: private studios account for the largest share, college-based studios the smallest, and preferences differ by age for ballet and modern dance. Most figures you report are consistent with the chart, including 48%, 24%, 10%, and the approximate student totals. However, the overview is not fully precise: it says ballet is most attended by under-11s but does not clearly compare this with the older group, and the location summary omits community halls and other venues. The tap discussion includes both age-group figures, but the comparison could be stated more clearly. To strengthen the response, give a concise overview of the key contrasts and report the remaining location share accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for the pie chart and age-group data. Phrases such as “Overall” and “Turning to the table” help signal the progression, and the reader can generally follow the comparisons. Some links are less effective or repetitive, however. For example, “also” is used to add information without always clarifying the relationship, while “likewise” joins figures that are not directly comparable. The overview also combines several points in a sentence that is difficult to follow. Use more precise comparison links, such as “whereas” or “by contrast,” and organise each data paragraph around a clear comparison to make the progression smoother.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “private studios,” “college-based studios,” “age range,” and “attended,” so the main information is usually understandable. There is also some variation in how you describe the visuals, such as “provides data” and “illustrates information.” However, several word choices and collocations are noticeably inaccurate or repetitive: “highest location … are attending by people,” “least attended location,” and “mix age group” do not express the intended comparisons naturally. Spelling errors such as “attened” and “yaers” also reduce accuracy. Aim for standard chart-reporting phrases and check spelling; for example, say that a venue “accounted for” a share and that a dance style was “more popular among” an age group.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex forms, including a contrast with “whereas” and clauses describing age groups. The response is divided into sentences and paragraphs, and its main meaning can generally be recovered. However, some errors in sentence structure, agreement, articles, and verb forms remain. For example, “Overall highest location … are attending by people” has an unclear structure and incorrect passive form, while “which age range is from 11 to 16” does not attach the age information grammatically to the students. “10% people are attended there” also has problems with the article and verb construction. Build more reliable comparison sentences, such as “Private studios were the most popular location, accounting for 48%,” and check subject–verb agreement and clause structure.

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