Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The provided pie chart and bar graph illustrates the data about location and various types of dance classes young adults in a town Australia are recendly attending.

Overall, most of the people used to practice privated studios for dance and least one is college- based sudios. Likewise, modern was the most popular dance type in 11 to 16 years and the ballet dance was the least popular type among this age wherese, under 11 years most people like to dance ballet and least on was modern.

The most individuals like to practice dance classes in private studios which accounted for 48%, where most people like to ballet dance aged of under 11, 600 and aged of 11 to 16 most people llike to modern dance aound 510 people. Followed by, school halls (after-school) was the second highest location which represent for 24% and community halls and other and collage based studios accounted for most least one by 18% and 10%.

Young adults which are under 11 used to practice tap around 450 people likewise modern was least one was accounted for 300 recpi

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover both charts and identify several important features: private studios are the largest location category at 48%, college-based studios are the smallest at 10%, and the preferred dance styles differ by age group. The comparisons that under-11s favour ballet (600) while 11–16-year-olds favour modern (about 510–520) are accurate. However, the overview is not fully precise: ballet is not the least popular style among the older group; modern is the most popular and ballet, at 300, is the least popular. The final paragraph also ends abruptly and leaves the age-group comparisons incomplete. To strengthen the report, summarise all three styles for both groups and state the main contrasts clearly, without adding unsupported claims such as “most people” where the chart only gives student counts.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview and paragraphs containing chart details. This gives the reader a basic route through the information. However, progression is uneven: the second paragraph combines location and age-group trends, and the next paragraph repeats some of those points before moving back to location figures. Linking phrases such as “Likewise” and “Followed by” do not always show the relationship between the information clearly, while the final sentence is unfinished. Organise the report more consistently—for example, describe the location chart in one paragraph and compare the age groups’ dance preferences in another. Use clear links such as “By contrast” for differences and ensure each paragraph develops a complete point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “accounted for,” “popular,” “location” and “aged,” and you attempt to vary expressions for describing the data. However, word choice and spelling errors are noticeable and sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “privated studios,” “recendly,” “collage based studios” and “recpi”; “practice dance classes” is also an unnatural collocation. Repeated use of “most people like” is imprecise for reporting chart figures. Build a more reliable set of Task 1 expressions, such as “the proportion attending,” “the number of students taking,” and “was the most popular choice.” Check spelling and use concise, accurate wording rather than repeating conversational phrases.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including comparisons between age groups, but control is inconsistent. The opening sentence has a subject–verb agreement error (“chart and bar graph illustrates”), and several clauses are difficult to follow because their grammatical relationships are unclear, as in “community halls and other and collage based studios accounted for most least one.” There are also problems with articles, prepositions and sentence boundaries, while the final sentence is incomplete. These errors sometimes make the intended comparison hard to understand. Practise forming complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use straightforward comparative patterns such as “Under-11s took ballet most often, whereas older students preferred modern.” Then check agreement and punctuation.

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