Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

This pie chart illustrate location and some qualites of dance in youth in a town australia. it shows us the location of classes.

The 4 different groups are interest in different classes. First and formost is private studios it is 48% in this under 11 year childs interst and they are take these classes.They are not show the dance in front of public so they are dance in privacy. School halls are also make learn to the students dance after schools the students have also intersert in. After this it increase the learn skills of students and learn an opportunity to the ytraditonal and culutral dance. Community halls and others are take classes of students by provide nights clubs functions nights and day party for 11 to 16 year old students. these are 18% of australia. College based studios are only 10% in australia for college students the young people take interest in to enjoy dance.

In conclusion in the ballet is 700 for privates studios community halls are 300 . The tap is 400 the value is rise school halls are 24% so this ratio is high. In modern collagr base is low 300 but community hall rise for public interest. Over all this pie chart shows us different classes about dance in australia.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response recognises that the visuals concern dance-class locations and types, and it reports several location percentages, including private studios at 48%, school halls at 24%, and college-based studios at 10%. However, the task is addressed only partially: the main age-group comparisons for ballet, tap, and modern are not accurately described. The conclusion assigns figures to locations and dance styles in ways the chart does not support—for example, “ballet is 700 for privates studios” and “modern collagr base is low 300.” The chart shows student numbers by age group, not by location. There is also no clear, accurate overview of the main patterns. Focus on summarising the largest location share and the contrasting preferences of the two age groups, using the chart’s categories correctly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response into an opening, a body paragraph, and a conclusion, and simple sequencing phrases such as “First and formost” and “After this” show an effort to connect ideas. However, the information does not progress clearly from one chart to the other. The body moves between locations, age groups, and unsupported explanations, while the conclusion introduces further figures without a clear relationship to the earlier points. References such as “these” and “it” are sometimes difficult to follow. To improve, use separate paragraphs for the location chart and the age-group chart, then add a concise overview and compare the key figures in a logical order.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some task-related vocabulary, including “private studios,” “school halls,” “community halls,” “ballet,” and “tap,” so the reader can identify the general subject. However, the range is limited and many word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the meaning difficult to understand. Phrases such as “some qualites of dance,” “they are dance in privacy,” and “the value is rise” are not natural ways to describe chart information. Spelling errors, including “intersert,” “ytraditonal,” and “collagr,” also reduce clarity. Build a more precise set of chart-reporting expressions, such as “accounted for,” “the proportion of,” and “the number of students taking,” and check spelling and word forms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple statements and longer sentences, but grammatical control is weak and errors frequently make relationships between ideas unclear. Examples include “This pie chart illustrate,” “The 4 different groups are interest,” and “they are take these classes,” which show problems with subject–verb agreement and verb forms. Articles, plurals, and sentence construction are also inconsistent, as in “in this under 11 year childs interst.” Several long sentences join multiple ideas without clear punctuation, making them difficult to follow. Practise accurate basic sentence patterns first, especially subject + verb + complement, then use a small number of controlled comparisons such as “More under-11s took ballet than modern.”

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