Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie chart illustrates the data on the location of dance sessions and the bar chart depicts the information about the types of dance classes mentioned with age groups.

Overall, major portion of dance classes held in private studios and smallest area is covered by College-based studios. Ballet dance practice is most popular among the students of group (under 11 age), Moreover modern dance is significantly considered among second group age of dancers.

Private studios has notable portion at 48% of the layout of dance classes and 24% protortion made by School halls (after-school). Others location has lowest part of classes such as Community halls and others represented about18%, Futhermore, College-based studios constituted only 10% of the dance sessions.

The age group of under 11 has more interest for Ballet dance, there are 600 students in this group. About 450 students of this group are in Tap dance classes and only 300 pupils are in Modern dance sessions. Mostly students about 520 are in numbers of another group (11-16 aged) are participated in Modern type of dance classes and only 300 in Ballet dance sessions.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover both charts and identify the main location pattern: private studios account for the largest share, while college-based studios have the smallest. You also report the key figures for the under-11 group and compare ballet and modern dance across the age groups. This gives the response a clear overview and relevant supporting data. However, the overview is not fully accurate: modern is the most popular style among 11–16-year-olds, but the response says it is “significantly considered” rather than clearly stating this comparison. The 11–16 tap figure (about 420) is also omitted, so the age-group comparison is less complete than the location summary. More precise, direct comparisons would strengthen the report.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, a paragraph on locations and a paragraph on dance types. This makes the information generally easy to follow, and the figures are grouped by chart rather than presented randomly. Some links between ideas are less clear, however. In the overview, “Moreover” joins points that would be clearer as a direct comparison, and the long sentence beginning “Mostly students about 520” is difficult to follow. “Others location” also makes the reference to community halls unclear. Use shorter, well-organised sentences and connect the age-group figures explicitly—for example, contrast the styles preferred by each group. This would make progression smoother and cohesion less mechanical.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “portion,” “represented,” “constituted” and “age group,” and the reader can generally understand the intended comparisons. However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for describing charts: “smallest area is covered,” “significantly considered,” and “in numbers … participated” do not express the data clearly. There are also noticeable spelling and word-form errors, such as “protortion” and “Futhermore,” alongside inconsistent capitalisation. Aim for precise, familiar reporting language rather than forcing formal-sounding expressions. Phrases such as “accounted for,” “was the most popular,” and “students enrolled in” would make the description more natural and accurate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, control is uneven, with errors in agreement, articles, sentence boundaries and clause construction. For example, “Private studios has” should use a plural verb, while “major portion” needs an article. The sentence “Mostly students about 520 are in numbers of another group … are participated” has a faulty structure and verb form; a clearer version would be “About 520 students aged 11–16 take modern dance classes.” Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, including the comma splice after “group (under 11 age).” Focus on accurate basic clauses first, then add complex structures where you can control them.

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