Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The charts illustrates information about location and type of dance classes young people in a town in Austraila are currently attending. We discuss about young genration attend classes. All information in the farm of number and percentage.

Overall, write down the main point of chart. We dicuss the location of dance classes in school hall. Private studios has highest percentage in the chart that is 48% and Community halls percentage is 18%. School halls after school percentage of young students is 24% and lastly College based studios percentage of young students only 10% in Australia.

On the other hand, we discuss the types of dance classes to by age groups.In addtion, Types of dance classes is Ballet, Tap and Modern. Mostly under 11 students in Ballet classes apporximatly 600 students and 11 to 16 age studend fell to 300 students in Ballet classes. Tap classes under 11 student apporximatly 450 students intrested and 11 to16 years students 420 students interested in Tap classes. Modern classes less interest of under 11 that is 300 students and 11 to 16 years students more intrested in modern classes that is 520 students.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover both charts and report the main figures accurately: private studios are highest at 48%, college-based studios lowest at 10%, and the age-group figures for ballet, tap and modern are broadly correct. This gives the reader a useful account of the data. However, the overview is not clearly stated: “Overall, write down the main point of chart” reads like an instruction rather than a summary of the key patterns. You could identify the contrast that younger children favour ballet while the older group favours modern, and that tap figures are similar. Some details are also less fully compared, particularly the overall distribution of locations. Replace the instruction-like sentence with a concise overview grounded in the charts.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic overall structure, moving from the location chart to the dance types, and the paragraph break helps distinguish these topics. The reader can generally follow the figures. However, progression is weakened by phrases such as “We discuss about” and “On the other hand,” which do not clearly express the relationship between the information. The opening sentence “Overall, write down the main point of chart” interrupts rather than guides the report, and repeated references to “we discuss” make the organisation feel mechanical. Grouping the age-group comparisons by dance type, then using clear links such as “whereas” or “by contrast,” would make the comparisons easier to follow and improve cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic vocabulary to identify the charts and categories, including “private studios,” “Ballet,” “Tap” and “Modern,” and the percentages and student numbers are communicated. However, the range is limited and several expressions are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “We discuss about,” “fell to 300 students,” and “less interest of under 11.” Spelling errors—including “Austraila,” “genration,” “addtion” and “intrested”—also make the writing less polished. Aim for precise reporting language and natural collocations, for example, “the number of students attending ballet classes was approximately 600” and “interest was lower among under-11s.” Proofreading spelling and word forms would make your meaning more consistently clear.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You communicate the main figures using mostly simple sentence patterns, and some comparisons are understandable, such as the contrast between 300 under-11 students and 520 students aged 11–16 in modern classes. However, grammatical control is uneven. The opening has a subject–verb agreement error (“The charts illustrates”), and several sentences lack a clear grammatical structure, including “Overall, write down the main point of chart.” There are also errors with articles, plurals and sentence boundaries, as in “Private studios has highest percentage” and “Types of dance classes is Ballet, Tap and Modern.” Try building accurate comparison sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use a small range of structures such as “while” and “whereas.” Careful editing for agreement and punctuation would improve clarity.

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