Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The charts in the diagram illustrate the location and types of dance classes that young people attend in Australia.

Overall, private studios holds the most portion of pie chart where maximum number of people attend their classes, followed by other locations. If we talk about types of dance classes, childrens under 11 years prefer ballet dance followed by others. On the other hand, childrens at the age of 11 to 16, they mostly attend classes of modern dance followed by others.

If we look closely at the pie chart, most of the dance classes are attended in the private studios (48%), followed by school halls (24%), community halls (18%) and college-based studios (10%). Ballet dance (600) is the most famous dance among childrens of age 11 or below, followed by tap dance (almost 450) and modern dance (300). Modern dance is more popular in childrens having age between 11 and 16, followed by tap dance and ballet dance.

If we compare, while ballet dance is more popular among childrens under 11, childrens of age 11 to 16 prefer modern dance. Private studio is the place where majority of young people attend their dance classes.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You cover both charts and give a clear overview: private studios account for the largest share, while ballet leads among under-11s and modern leads among 11–16-year-olds. The location figures are reported accurately, and you include the key dance-class values for the younger group. Your comparison that preferences differ by age is also relevant. However, the older group’s figures are not reported, even though they are important to supporting the overview: modern is about 520, tap 420, and ballet 300. Phrases such as “followed by others” leave the comparisons vague. To strengthen the response, include these figures and make the age-group contrasts more specific rather than relying on general statements.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction and overview to details and a final comparison. This gives the reader a coherent overall route through the information. However, the final paragraph largely repeats the overview and the point about private studios, so it adds little progression. Linking phrases such as “If we look closely” and “If we compare” are understandable but somewhat formulaic, and “followed by others” does not clearly identify which categories are being compared. The response already shows some logical grouping; to make the progression more effective, use the detail paragraphs to compare both age groups directly, and avoid restating the same conclusions at the end.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough topic vocabulary to communicate the chart information, including “private studios,” “school halls,” “ballet,” “tap,” and “modern dance.” Some choices are imprecise or unnatural, however, and the same basic wording is repeated. For example, “most portion” is not a natural way to describe a share, “most famous” suggests reputation rather than participation, and “prefer” is repeated where the chart shows attendance numbers. “Other locations” is also vague when the categories can be named. Aim for more precise chart language such as “largest share,” “most popular” or “highest enrolment,” and vary expressions for describing figures and comparisons. These improvements would make the vocabulary more accurate and flexible.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex sentences, including the contrast beginning “while ballet dance is more popular…” and the conditional-style framing “If we look closely…”. The main meaning is generally clear, but some grammatical errors remain. For example, “private studios holds” has subject–verb disagreement, and “childrens” is incorrectly formed and lacks an apostrophe when referring to children. The sentence “On the other hand, childrens at the age of 11 to 16, they mostly attend…” has an unnecessary repeated subject and an awkward clause structure. There are also article and number-pattern issues in phrases such as “in the private studios.” Work on agreement, plural forms, and constructing direct comparison sentences; these changes would improve accuracy while preserving your range.

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