Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The charts illustrate information on the location and types of dance classes of young people in a town in a Australia are currently inrolled.

Overall, high number of students are attending in private studios and lowest number of students are inroled in college based studios. ballet dance is more commen in under 11 years old students whereas moderen dance is more commen in teenagers.

highest number of students are attending dance classes in private studios which is 48% while only 10% young people are inroled in college based studios.

on the hand students who are going to comunity halls and others are 18% and 24% students are learning inschool hall after school.

Secondly more then 600 students are practicsing ballet dance which is more commen in under 11 age group and only 300 students in age between 11 to 16 are alsp learning same dance.

Tap dance is in moderate level around 470 students under 11 years and about 450 students age group 11 to 16 are showing interest in it.

Modderen dance is more famous in age group 11 to 16 about 520 students are inroled it it where only 300 young people under 11 attending these dance classes

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover both charts and identify several important comparisons: private studios account for the largest share (48%), college-based studios the smallest (10%), ballet is more popular among under-11s, and modern dance among 11–16-year-olds. These points support a relevant overview. Most figures are broadly accurate, although the tap figures are reversed: the chart shows about 450 under-11 students and 420 in the older group, not around 470 and 450 respectively. The opening also says “high number” of students attend studios, which is less precise than describing the proportions. To strengthen the response, report the key comparisons more clearly and accurately, including that older students favour modern dance while younger students favour ballet.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction and overview are followed by details about locations and dance types. This makes the main information reasonably easy to locate. However, progression is uneven: the location details are presented before the age-group comparisons, and transitions such as “on the hand” and “Secondly” do not clearly signal the relationships between points. Some sentences also combine several figures without a clear comparison, particularly the tap sentence. Use separate, logically grouped paragraphs for the two charts, and connect figures with explicit contrasts such as “whereas” or “by comparison.” Clearer referencing and more accurate linking would make the organisation smoother and less mechanical.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “private studios,” “college based studios,” “age group,” and “attending,” so the reader can generally understand the subject. However, the range is limited and several words are repeated, especially “students,” “dance,” and “more common.” There are also noticeable spelling and word-form errors, such as “inroled,” “comunity,” “practicsing,” and “moderen,” which reduce precision and can slow the reader. Some expressions are also unnatural, for example “showing interest in it” when describing chart numbers. Build a more accurate range for reporting data, using terms such as “account for,” “participate in,” and “the figure for,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer comparisons, including “Ballet dance is more common in under 11 years old students whereas modern dance is more common in teenagers.” This shows some ability to link ideas, and the intended meaning is usually recoverable. However, errors in sentence structure, articles, agreement, and prepositions occur across the response. For example, “in a Australia” has an incorrect article, while “24% students are learning inschool hall” lacks a needed preposition and article. The final sentence, “about 520 students are inroled it it,” is also structurally unclear. Practise accurate patterns such as “24% attend school halls” and “520 students are enrolled in modern classes,” and use punctuation to separate comparisons.

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