Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The charts illustrate the locations and types of dance classes attended by young people in the town of Australia.
Private studios are the most popular locations,While college based studio are the least popular.While bar chart compares the number of students under 11 to 16 age groups.In Ballet,the greatest number of students in modren class approximately 600.Meanwhile,the smallest number of students in modren dance class 300.
The provided pie chart explained the most preferable percentage of Private studios is 48%.The second preferable location of School halls (after-school) is 24%.Furthermore,the location of community half & other is greater as compared to College-based studios.
The given table describes that ballet is more popular as compared to others.Then Modern is least popular than others under 11 age.In 11-16 age group the greater number of students in modren approximately 600 and less preferable is Ballet approximately 300.In between,the number of students in Tap under 11 age group is approximately 450.Moreover,the number of students in tap under 11-16 age group is 450.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
You identify the main location pattern: private studios lead at 48%, while college-based studios have the smallest share, and you compare the two age groups across dance styles. However, several key details are inaccurate or unclear. For under-11s, ballet—not modern—has the highest figure, at about 600; modern is lowest, at about 300. For ages 11–16, modern is highest at roughly 520, rather than 600, and tap is about 420, not 450. The statement that ballet is generally more popular also overlooks the older group’s higher modern and tap figures. Include a concise overview of the main contrasts, then report the figures accurately and compare the age groups directly to make the summary more complete.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has a basic structure, moving from an introduction to location information and then age-group comparisons. This gives the reader some sense of how the charts are being discussed. However, progression is not consistently clear: the second paragraph repeats the private-studio figure, and the final paragraph shifts between general claims and individual figures without a clear organising principle. Connectors such as “Meanwhile,” “Furthermore,” and “Moreover” are used, but some do not clarify the relationship between ideas; for example, “In between” does not clearly introduce the tap comparison. Organise the body by chart or by age group, and use linking phrases only when they express a precise comparison or contrast.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use some task-related vocabulary, including “locations,” “age groups,” “percentage,” and “popular,” so the topic is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or repetitive. “Most preferable” and “second preferable” are unnatural in this context; “largest share” and “second-largest share” would be more precise. “Community half” appears to be an incorrect word choice, and “modren” is misspelled repeatedly. The repeated use of “number of students” and “popular” also makes the description less varied. Build a small set of accurate chart terms—such as “accounted for,” “figure,” “highest,” and “lowest”—and check spelling and collocations before submitting.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt both simple statements and longer comparisons, but the range of sentence structures is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make some relationships difficult to follow. For example, “While college based studio are the least popular” is an incomplete clause, and “the greatest number of students in modren class approximately 600” lacks a clear verb and article. There are also agreement and punctuation problems, as in “Private studios are the most popular locations,While…” and “the number of students in Tap under 11 age group is approximately 450.” Use complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, check singular/plural agreement, and separate sentences with appropriate punctuation. A few carefully controlled complex sentences would also improve variety.
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