Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The pie chart illustrates the proportion of five locations where young people attend different type of dance classes recently in australia.

Overall, the locations in australia where different age groups involved in different kinds of dancing in community halls, private studios, school halls and college-based studios.

Private studios covers a large proportion 48% as followed by the school halls after the school 24%. Meanwhile the community halls and other or college-based studios covers area 18%, 10%

children who are 11- 16 years old takes part in ballet, there is no such difference in tap is approximately 405. As modren dance is quite popular so the number of students is more than 500.

On the other side we can see that children under the age 11 they are fond of ballet dance there is large numbber of pupils in it approximately 600. In tap 430 and modren dance 300 number of students are involved in this activity.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover both charts and include several relevant figures, such as private studios at 48%, school halls at 24%, and the under-11 ballet figure of about 600. You also identify the main age-related contrast: ballet is more popular among younger children, while modern dance attracts more 11–16-year-olds. However, the overview is unclear and does not summarise the key patterns accurately enough: it lists locations rather than stating that private studios are the leading venue and college-based studios the least common. Some comparisons are incomplete or confusing, particularly the sentence about 11–16-year-olds and ballet, and the tap figures are not clearly compared across age groups. A clearer overview and more precise reporting of both charts would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure: an introduction, a general statement, and separate discussion of locations and dance types. This gives the reader some sense of organisation, and phrases such as “Meanwhile” and “On the other side” attempt to connect ideas. However, progression is uneven: the overview repeats the introduction without presenting a clear summary, and the discussion of age groups shifts between ballet, tap and modern without a consistent comparison pattern. The final paragraph also repeats information rather than drawing the comparisons together. Use one paragraph for the venue proportions and another that compares each dance type across the two age groups, with clear references such as “by contrast” and “whereas”.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “proportion,” “private studios,” “school halls,” and “number of students,” so the topic is generally understandable. However, the range and control are limited, and several word choices or collocations sound unnatural, such as “covers a large proportion,” “covers area,” and “fond of ballet dance.” There are also spelling errors in “modren” and “numbber,” and “different type” is not an accurate form for this context. These issues make the report less precise and less fluent. Aim for standard chart language such as “accounted for,” “represented,” and “participated in,” and check spelling and word forms carefully before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, and the reader can usually understand the intended comparisons. However, grammatical control is inconsistent. For example, “The pie chart illustrates the proportion of five locations” has an inaccurate sentence structure, while “Private studios covers” and “children … takes part” show subject–verb agreement problems. The overview sentence beginning “Overall, the locations…” is incomplete, and the final location figures are joined without a clear grammatical structure. Articles, plurals and sentence boundaries also need attention. Practise writing complete overview sentences and checking that each subject agrees with its verb; for example, “Private studios account for 48%” and “students aged 11–16 take part in ballet.”

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