Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The charts illustrates the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Overall, private studio is most popular for dance classes,while the college bases studio was less popular.In type dance classes ajority of students were in ballet under 11 and least number of students were in modern dance under 11.

In the location of dance classes the private studio was most poular accounted for 48% however, school halls was followed the private studio and 24% gain popularity.In contrast,the communiooty hall and college based school had similar popularity from 18% tyyyo 10% respectively.

As for the types of dance classes by age gropups concerned,in ballet there are 600 people attend dance classes they are under 11, on the other hand 300 people aged 11 to 16 attend ballet, around 500 younger people attend tap dance classes and approximately 400 older people join the class. in modern class there are 500 older childern they attending the class and 300 younger children attend modern class.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover both charts and give a relevant overview: private studios have the largest share, while college-based studios have the smallest, and you identify the high and low figures for the under-11 group. Most reported figures are consistent with the chart. However, the overview is incomplete because it does not capture the main contrast between age groups: ballet is highest for under-11s, whereas modern is highest for 11–16-year-olds. The body does report this latter pattern, but the wording “500 older children” is less precise than the chart’s approximate figure of 520. The location comparison also calls community halls and college-based studios similar despite their different shares. Select the key contrasts more clearly and make the overview reflect both charts.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction and overview to location data and then dance types. This makes the information generally easy to follow. You also use basic linking expressions such as “Overall,” “In contrast,” and “As for.” However, some connections are awkward or unclear: “school halls was followed the private studio” does not clearly express the comparison, and the final long sentence combines several age-group figures without clear separation. The overview also runs together several points, making the main comparisons harder to identify. Use one focused paragraph for each chart, group figures by age or dance style consistently, and use accurate comparison phrases to make progression smoother.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “accounted for,” “percentage,” “attend,” and “approximately,” and the reader can usually identify the categories being discussed. However, the range and control are limited, with repeated use of “popular” and “people,” and several inaccurate or misspelled forms such as “college bases,” “communiooty,” “gropups,” and “childern.” Some collocations are also unnatural, for example “24% gain popularity” and “in modern class.” These choices sometimes make the intended comparison less clear. Build a more precise set of terms for describing proportions and participation, and check spelling and word forms carefully. Prefer neutral descriptions of the figures rather than describing every category as popular.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a contrast with “on the other hand” and a clause beginning “As for the types…”. The main information is generally recoverable, but some errors in sentence structure, agreement, articles, and punctuation reduce clarity. For example, “The charts illustrates” has subject–verb disagreement, while “school halls was followed” has an incorrect verb pattern. The opening overview also joins clauses without adequate punctuation, and the final sentence shifts between singular and plural constructions. Aim for shorter, complete sentences when listing figures, and check that subjects and verbs agree. Practise accurate comparative structures such as “the figure for… was higher than…” before adding more complex clauses.

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